A Spangled cloth glinting in a corner
Languishing solely in despair
Mumbling a thousand sigh endured,
With an eek so ardent – so disregarded.
Shoddy piece of a diminutive cloth
Impeccably tousled by torment
Sorely crippled and perplexed,
Down on that rickety chair.
Author notes
The Best of AP
A contest entry
- The Bigger, The Better by lowercase prelude.
900 points, ended August 23, 2008, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - AP Family :) by thearmsofsorrow.
300 points, ended September 10, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Best of AP by ageofdarkpoets.
450 points, ended October 6, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Interesting. It's very descriptive -
i liked this alot. it was a little hard to understand but i sort of got it after i read through it again. i think you have done a great job
Love always
Erica Carnea
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Ahh this is really good
Welcome to my ap family, What would you like to be?
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Outstanding
you have done an outstanding job I loved the flow of this it was a little hard to understand but then i read again it was an amazing poem well done
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Very interesting and quire unique - more I read it more I lived it - great vocab and love your word choices and some great phrasing "impeccably tousled by torment" great stuff.
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I enjoyed the awesome imagery in this. Thanks for sharing.
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I liked this poem it flowed nicely. Wow and congrads on your bronze medal tropy. Thank you for sharing.
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This is great. Good imagery. And, congrats on an excellent grasp on the English language. Very well done; thank you for sharing.
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oohh, i really like this,
good luck in the contest and take care
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Wow
That's all I can say. I'm not even sure I've heard of some of those words, but, because of good imagery it's easy to figure out what they mean. This could be a good educational tool for vocabulary. well done UNT
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your word usage is terrific
and your imagery is good as well -
I hope that you do awesome in that contest, Dina! The use of so many big words detracts from the beauty of the poem. Maybe tone it down a little. Otherwise, great job.
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