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#6. Of Clowns and Jokers, by jinsays

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In between self imposing barriers,
contemplate my duplicitious horrors
With this many guilty souls out here,
it's easy to see why.

Around the time you stopped making sense
thought I'd interpretedyour offense, you'd run the

wrong way into defense, and oh man!

There's no way I could win.

When I met you, you were insane
You never got better, said

I was to blame.

sure, and our friends just said,

let's forget about that

break out the fine champagne

 it's time we celebrate.

 

Party's over, but not for you
I need sleep, sure the floor will do

You sit up there and drink some more
No goodnight kiss. Not tonight dear,

I have a headache.

I wait as another clown shoe falls,
tell's me I'm make no sense at all,
Did I recall passing you the ball?
No dummy, we're not playing football

It's a song dear, and we're in a rodeo!

 

 

 in response to:

"It's so hard to keep this smile from my face

Losing control, I'm all over the place
Clowns to the left of me
Jokers to the right
Here I am, stuck in the middle with you
Well you started off with nothing
And you're proud that you're a self made man
And your friends they all come crawlin'
Slap you on the back and say, "Please, please"

"Tried to make some sense at all
But I can see it makes no sense at all
Is it cool to go to sleep on the floor?
You don't think that I can take anymore
Clowns to the left of me
Jokers to the right
Here I am, stuck in the middle with you

"And you started off with nothing
And you're proud that you're a self
Slap you on the back and say, "Please, please"

Author notes

I know it needs help.

Okay explanation seems necessary for this. I was attempting to personify the song as two bums not really making any sense to each other. The end was my shameless attempt to make you laugh be revealing the football game was really a rodeo, guess I fell flat, huh? I will try and edit once more before the final.

6."Stuck in the Middle (with You)" - Steeler's Wheel by jinsays
Parts that I concentrated on, words and music by Jerry Rafferty.

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Comments

  • Ace - LightWithinMe
    August 19, 2008

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    Hello.

    Good song, I came across it in the Reservoir Dogs. Anyway your actual write, definately has shades of the song, with notable lines tipping respective hats. At times you are making no sense, but at other times, you sound completely mad, hahaha. On a serious note, your first stanza I liked the best, it makes a strong point, the others, have a more surreal vibe to them, and thus I take less from them than the first stanza. I wish you well in the contest.

    My regards.


  • Riamh
    August 19, 2008

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    A very unusual and descriptive poem, Jin. I liked the way it flowed and I was with it, until the last stanza....I got lost at that stage. Probably my lack of interpretive skills.


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    August 19, 2008

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    Nicely done. Great take on the prompt. I enjoyed the read. It is a strongly written piece of poetry. Best of luck in the contest.