You attempt to carelessly
toss away my dreams
as they fly softly
into oblivion,
but I know your scent
and sense the joy between us
every time we touch.
You will always be
my perfect illusion.
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Prompt - blind. Less than 50 words (36 words)
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A contest entry
- QUICKIE - 15 entries! prompt. by etoile.
300 points, ended August 26, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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this piece was a brilliant take on the prompt!
i really loved it
especially the last 2 lines.
thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest
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May all our allusions be as well thought out and written as this one! Like the way the poem says two things (or more) at once!
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'perfect illusion' - yes, sometimes that is the rub eh? - how to get beyond that and see all the grime and grit and everything real ... without stepping back.
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