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August

When summer returned alone
shorn of company I'd rather keep
and despite all feeling
the Sun still swept the sky to fall
and Moon followed faithful rise

and August held the front
of time while tears covered a  fallen side;
morning was not the welcomed friend
it had been when it kissed your eyes.

But I know that within me
there is the ash of life and you
are there in the ember and the coal
for some reason, some faultless moment
brought so much and yet so little.

For love does not change its face
not by age, nor rise of joy fall
of sadness; it measures us and keeps us
and we will always know its touch.




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  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    November 12, 2008

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    Another of my favorite poets whose work I would recognize in a heartbeat. Each poem has such graceful language and offers insights into life and love. The concluding stanza would be the perfect inclusion in a wedding ceremony. The words are timeless. I look forward to your entry in the next round. Peace, Liz


  • SeptemberFaith
    October 6, 2008

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    I think you are very true to the meaning of, Saudade.

    my favorite lines are

    But I know that within me
    there is the ash of life and you
    are there in the embers and the coal
    for some reason, some faultless moment
    brought so much; and yet so little"

    It feels like the void only goes so deep, and somewhere, the remnents of what you are missing, are still there....

    Very nicely done!!! I give you a 10!

    Criss


  • Koromone
    August 28, 2008
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    i love this one u r very talented! xx


  • nilav
    August 28, 2008

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    i think August will be full of gratitude to the poet for immortalizing her like this....with an added flavour of love


  • MelodiousDreaming
    August 28, 2008
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    Again, beauty penned here. I must keep an eye on you, you have a great amount of talent!


  • firefly53633
    August 28, 2008

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    Sweetly Sung!

    This poem has an underlying melodious feel to it! Delightful to read! I especially enjoyed the last stanza! Extremely moving! Well done! Kudos to you!


  • maa gold member
    August 20, 2008

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    thank you so much for sharing such sensitive and gentle words with us in response to the current situation ... when I have no words, or only clumsy ones, a verse like yours expresses what I am unable to express ... in such moments, I am short of wisdom (not only then ), and there seems to be no appropriate way of consoling one in grief ...
    through gentle understanding, and putting yourself in the other person's skin, a space of trust is created and surrender can take place ... tears can fall freely ...

    thank you so much for your precious poetic assistance, this sounds a bit silly, but it is of such great importance right now ...

    much love,
    maa


  • gaze
    August 19, 2008

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    The eternal memory, the forever lasting love which will continue in some other sphere. The second chapter, leaving immense 'saudade' behind. That great void can only be soothed when we know nothing has really ended.
    That soothing feeling you pass through your words.


    • Peteskid gold member
      August 20, 2008
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      Thank you, Mari yet another "saudade" many meanings somehow become one...h


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    August 19, 2008

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    "...you are there in the ember..."

    The glow, ever-present,
    if nourished with memories,
    this gentle portrayal of August.

    Aesthete




  • Nicolette gold member
    August 19, 2008

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    for love does not change its face
    not by age, nor rise of joy fall
    of sadness; it measures us and keeps us
    and we will always know its touch.

    I just had to copy those lines, PK...it resonates with and within me. yes, somehow in loss it's still a comfort to know that the same sun and moon shine on all of us and even when we can not see them, they are there.. constant, like love. Wonderful spiritual quality about this poem - something timeless. Thank you for this.

    ~ Nicolette

    • Peteskid gold member
      August 20, 2008
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      Some how we always arrive at this enduring idea, the one meaning, like many faces of a diamond... thank you..PK


  • Wind 03
    August 19, 2008

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    beautiful!

    for love does not change its face
    not by age, nor rise of joy fall
    of sadness; it measures us and keeps us
    and we will always know its touch.

    loved this line...you writing is amazing!!!

    juliet

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