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Dawn

Cascading twilight
Never ending nights

Willow trees
The wind blows

Gentle moonlight
My heart sways

Glistening dew
transcends the dawn

Alone again
Without you love

No one
To hold me close

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  • etoile
    August 22, 2008
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    i would prefer if you used some punctuation to help the flow
    but otherwise this was a good take on the prompt.

    i especially liked
    'Glistening dew
    tanscends the dawn'
    and

    Cascading twilight
    'ever ending nights'

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • Blueskywonder
    August 20, 2008
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    It is good you still see natural beauty that surrounds, picking out the hope in all things yet sad that you have no-one to share with or comfort and enjoy you! some beautiful imagery painted with this emotional piece. Thank-you for sharing... keep writing! Great poem!


  • aanika
    August 19, 2008
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    Glistening dew
    transcends the dawn

    very pretty.
    nice take on the prompt,
    good luck.