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Gift from the Sea (Rondell)

Upon the seashore she longed for more
little seashells that kissed the sands well.
Across the sea's floor, no color would bore,
and little pearls fell that would cast a spell.

Little beauties explore, from the center core,
casting a sweet bell on top the seashell.
Upon the seashore's she longed for more
little seashells that kissed the sands well.

Off white or pastel a precious gift to tell.
A sweet passionate score, around her neck wore,
a gift to explore, that gram had in store.
A gift one can't sell, or be cursed to swell.
Upon the seashore's she longed for more

Author notes

Rondel

A French form consisting of 13 lines: two quatrains and a quintet, rhyming as follows:

ABba abAB abbaA. The capital letters are the refrains, or repeats.


LMAO well anyone who knows me knows I shall always do it a Tory style as well so here was my pre-editted version (wich i loved more so) ah well

Upon the seashore she longed for more
little seashells that kissed the sands well.
Across the sea's floor, no color would bore,
and little pearls fell that would cast a spell.

Little precious beauties, rose up from the sea
casting sweet shadows on the sea's pillows.
Upon the seashore she longed for more
little seashells that kissed the sands well.

Off white in shade a precious gift was made.
A sweet passion born, around her neck worn,
a look forlorn reflects a heart that's torn.
Priceless trinket home-made, will never fade.
Upon the seashore's she longed for more

Torys rhyme scheme (LMAO) ABba cdAB effeA. The capital letters are the refrains, or repeats

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  • Swan song gold member
    August 23, 2008
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    I love these french forms and there are a whole slew of them to write, You penned this very well


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 19, 2008

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    I'm not a fan of old French repeaters but this is really well done
    Keep 'em coming!


  • Griswold silver member
    August 19, 2008

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    Either one was beautifully done baby, and by the way you did a RONDEL. TFF. But wasnt it supposed to be a collab with one of your free-verse girlfriends? Love you baby, greeeaat job...Scott


    • PassionsPromise gold member
      August 19, 2008
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      it was suppose to be a double rondel..with anyone I chose...didnt specify a free verse girlfriend....hmmm.

      Dont make me find another girl..I will you know


      • Griswold silver member
        August 19, 2008
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        They throw themselves at your feet, you dont have to look.

        • PassionsPromise gold member
          August 19, 2008
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          Well hmmm.. okay..well take this romeo....

          I, HEREBY, TORY, KNOWN AS PASSIONSPROMISE IS SEEKING A FREEVERSE WRITER, FEMALE, TO DO A DOUBLE RONDEL PIECE IN SENSUAL/EROTIC (LMAO) ANY TAKERS?

          MUST BE WILLING TO ATTEMPT THIS RONDEL W/ ME. ANY TAKERS?????????????

          P.PROMISE


        • Griswold silver member
          August 19, 2008
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          Yes it was, you got the one to do a rhyming form poem, and it was a little after that. Wasnt it Kiwi?


  • Volfeng
    August 18, 2008

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    very nice my love Wow...I love you...

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