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Bedazzled.

Connotational years
[wasted thinking about you]
I gave in to your lips [entirely untouchable]
eyes [explicitly flawless]
& touch [shamefully irresistible]
...only to be tossed around carelessly
as if I didn't matter at all.
Hence; I'm endlessly bedazzled by your irrelevant actions
& always will be.

♥

Author notes

Prompt: Blind
but used bedazzled instead.
Sawry this wasn't thee best, love.
I got exactly 50 words though

Picture Credit: thedancerinthedark

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  • she still smiles x gold member
    September 1, 2008

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    *I gave in to your lips [entirely untouchable]
    eyes [explicitly flawless]
    & touch [shamefully irresistible]
    ...only to be tossed around carelessly
    as if I didn't matter at all. *

    Brilliantly written! I fell in love with the dazzling imagery in those few lines. You did very well on this prompt my bff

    I LOVE YOUUU BERT<33333


  • etoile
    August 26, 2008
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    i thought your brackets were too much for this short piece,
    maybe if you seperated it into a few lines it wouldve flowed better. i also thought 'hence' was a really awkward word there, maybe just delete it?

    but i still Loved the idea!! this was a very good take on the prompt, and the picture was perfect

    goodluck in the contest


  • Re-invention silver member
    August 20, 2008

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    awwwwww I love this to bunches... b/c I can realte to it very much.. like the wya you took the prompt and made it personal and dirty prettyish which is something fairly unique and beautiful...
    the best of luck sis.. nicely penned!


  • aanika
    August 19, 2008

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    your lips [entirely untouchable]
    eyes [explicitly flawless]
    & touch [shamefully irresistible]

    beautifully phrased


  • XRainbowliciousX
    August 19, 2008

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    I thought it was amazing.
    : )
    It's like you stop and then you get another sentence as if your hanging from a cliff.
    XD


  • Poetryistherapy
    August 19, 2008
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    Fantastically written!! I love your dirty pretty style... its heartwrenching to read! Great Job.


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    August 18, 2008

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    Wonderful take on the prompt. Your emotions were penned in a magnificent way. This was really good.

    Best of luck in the contest

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