Once upon a time
[only.read.in.fairytales♥]
Used to be a beautiful beginning to a newborn love
Now happy endings & prince charmings
Are rational to attain in reality, yet it's all we dream of;
I'm in the palm of your hand
Impatiently waiting to be carried to a wonderous place in your heart---
I must have been dreaming
For you're not the man I thought you were
You held me captive as a depleted hostage
& I'm attentively unsure
How you can just stand there;
watching the tears fall down my trembling face
...without a simple conformity on why I was upset in the first place.
Take one look in my eyes
& explain to me how you can't see through the fake smile I only wear for you
Take a stroll through my mind
& reveal the hidden secrets buried deep down in my numerous thoughts
Put yourself in my shoes
& understand that you're tearing me down
[baby, I'm caged forever in your ignorance]
I truly believe this time,
I've been tied to your chains for far too long
Your "begging" for me to stay strangled in your arms
Is tempting and alluringly so wrong
The wings you destroyed the night I met you
Are regaining their strength to finally fly away
...because without you I know I'll eventually be okay.
Please;;
Put yourself in my shoes
& understand that you're tearing me down
[baby, I'm caged forever in your innocence]
♥
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Comments
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Captivating
Dahling, this was simply MARVELOUS. Kudos to you for taking something as cliche as a fairytale and turning it into something so much more; I love the uniqueness in this poem and how you were able to connect a fantasy with your emotions in real life.
*I truly believe this time,
I've been tied to your chains for far too long
Your "begging" for me to stay strangled in your arms
Is tempting and alluringly so wrong*
Wonderful and vivid imagery!
*Once upon a time
[only.read.in.fairytales♥]
Used to be a beautiful beginning to a newborn love
Now happy endings & prince charmings
Are rational to attain in reality, yet it's all we dream of*
I've never understood the concept of having a "prince charming" yet so many girls yearn for such a person. I do wonder when people started to look at fairytales as a guidebook and promise of love.
Beautiful, as always my love<33333
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Oh I do love this, you have a wonderful flow to this poem and it is something we can all relate to, welcome to the finalist list. Best to you
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Love this, and I think I agree, change to ignorance would be great for the last innocence, but leave the first two or so as innocence, just a thought. Very well done!
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Please;;
Put yourself in my shoes
& understand that you're tearing me down
[baby, I'm caged forever in your innocence]
These words make perfect sense to me. If you replaced the word innocence with ignorance, it would be right to a T.
Beautifully wrote. I can relate to how fairytales really aren't the way people expect.
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this was great
you emotion was penned very well -
i love the metaphor you used in this one: caged in your innocence
very good
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if this isn't done.. then I can't wait to see whats to come!
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