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Her Kisses; Your lies.

  And with every song you sang,
and every line you wrote,
 

my heart sank to the bottom of the
Ocean (With the fish and the rocks and the
Broken Sea Glass.)

You were just another line in the poem,
And my heart was just another road kill,

Decaying on the side of
  the Heart Ache Highway that you designed for my
Sympathy.



  You held my strings
  And pulled on them
  As if I was some sort of



[Puppet]


  Speaking for you;

  At you/To you;
  Through you.


Every transparency of your Lies
Wrapped themselves around me,
(Like I was just a leftover
  From the night before. 

Ready to sit until you needed me again.)



And the whispers that rolled of your tongue,
Were soft like eyelash wishes
But hit like a bullet,


  Lining the stitching of my soul.

Broken Rainbows were crushed in my pockets,
And Dying stars were stuck underneath my
  Finger nails,


As I reached for you.

  You were so close,
  And yet so far away,

The taste of your thoughts
Tainted my tongue,
And the feeling of your insecurities
Were stuck in between my fingers,

Like a collarbone of Mess ups, Lies, and others' Kisses.


So while you spoke to me,
And sung to her,

I sunk underneath it all,

Resting in a grave made of
Imperfections


    and echoing Tragedies,

Touching the idea of
a broken sunrise. 

Author notes

I was thinking, "Oh. I can't do this. I'm the one who's the heart breaker."
(Actually, now that I think about it, I could have done an apology letter too. But whatever.)

And then I remembered back to Freshman year, (God, Four years ago now!)
Where I was obsessed with this kid for a year and a half and he just fucked with me..
So this is to him, I guess.

Nice contest idea.

I hope you like it. <3

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  • Dark Shadow
    August 19, 2008

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    the expression in this was awesome, I agree with aanika it was a lil choppy but it still flowed very well almost like a beat poem. Ive written some things like this and it feels awesome to get it out. Good luck in the contest this is a really awesome write.


  • aanika
    August 18, 2008

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    Speaking for you;

    At you/To you;
    Through you.

    wow. that flowed so well! like it was choppy but it worked and I don't know how to express myself.


    And the whispers that rolled of your tongue,
    Were soft like eyelash wishes
    But hit like a bullet,


    Lining the stitching of my soul.

    *mouth falls open*
    and you say you're no good with METAPHORS?
    this is amazing.
    good luck... not that you need it.


    • They Say Shannon
      August 18, 2008
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      Pft.
      Shutup.
      It's not nearly as good as yours.
      And we'll see. You'll win,
      As usual. >.>

      • aanika
        August 18, 2008
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        pft.
        I will not.
        watch & see
        and this is 198643907390457 times better than mine.
        notice I'm not rating your comment five stars because I DON'T AGREE

        ..
        much love

  • withoutlove13
    August 18, 2008
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    yes!! I love it, every line of it! it flowed so so incredibly well.

    As if I was some sort of
    [Puppet]
    Speaking for you;
    At you/To you;
    Through you.

    Every transparency of your Lies
    Wrapped themselves around me,

    ^^^^^ my favorite lines
    thank you for entering =]

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