Here lies a sacred eden
Where heaven touches earth
and the dusk of temporals glory
Allows for nights rebirth
So night will tell her story
Till her sparkle bring them mirth
A contest entry
- Quickie~ 30/30/24 by SuicidalLover.
600 points, ended August 22, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Kind of makes me think of someone hiding themselves away to heal.
I could be wrong though.
Either way i thought it was a good piece. -
Tis a sparkle of beauty, I appreciate the main stanza the most, the 2 lines beneath are less needed in my eyes. Possibly because I feel there isn't much of a story, only a fragment, a delicious moment of a vision.
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i love this poem good job keep up the good work and write some more poems for i can here them but good job
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this was a nice write.
good imagery & goodluck in the contest
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good stuff
very good rhyming scheme once again, you are impressive.
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