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As I sit and stare out the window,
across the yard at the old dog;
I watch him carefully, moving slow,
As he threads the morning fog.
His age now showing, for any stint.
His agile frame is no more!
His eyes have lost that sparkling glint,
clouded, dim, not like before.
Keen hearing that made his mark,
has failed to serve him now;
Strangers encroach, and without a bark,
he doesn't understand how!
His muzzle is gray, white hairs appear,
his coat has lost it's luster.
His muscles now lack, diminished I fear,
Each day is all he can muster!
He is slow to rise, his limbs are stiff.
The cat he passes by!
A Once great tracker, with only a sniff,
Catching frisbees on the fly.
A herding dog by his heritage.
A once noble guardian of sheep!
Proudly displayed his lineage,
watcher of the flock to keep.
Leaping bounds, from hither and fro,
his authority to deploy.
Sheep understood, his bark they'd know,..
they respected the good ol' boy!
Now, too old to chase the cat,
he lays around all day!
Sometimes he doesn't know where he's at.
Makes me sad to see him this way.
A loyal companion that he's been,..
I can only comfort the old dog,
and watch carefully for my friend,
As he threads the morning fog!!!
A contest entry
- Dalaney Contest 8 'Memories' by Sue Cardwell.
650 points, ended August 23, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrites by aeolia.
400 points, ended October 26, 2008, 130 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rhymed prewrites only ... by ecrivain01.
750 points, ended November 14, 2008, 61 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Animal Poems by FloridaGatorQueen.
525 points, ended May 14, 42 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is such a sweet poems. I like the way you share your memories here. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest
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A loving tribute. After judging poems all night, how odd to come across to trophy worthy entries in a row! (No guarantees, mind you, I'm just talking on my own behalf.) We've got three or four now all of which are worthy of Gold in someones contest, so it will be interesting to see how this plays out. Anyway, this is going into the finalists!
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Thank you for your entry in the contest. A very beautiful but sad poem telling of man's best friend and his slow and painful demise. A very enjoyable read,
Your rhyme and flow is excellent and should you wish to enter any further contests of our please would you enter in the main contest and not Dalaneys as this is primarily for people who ar new to rhyming poetry.
Thanks again
Sue and Jeff
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I really like the subject. I also think you do a great job at developing a sense of pity for the poor old dog. Very good rhythm and rhyming was solid, too. Nice take on the prompt.
If I might make one minor critique: I found the exclamation points distracting. There were far too many.
Good luck!
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How lovely this write is
This border collie is the spitting image of mine we named Too Sweet she is very old now and is being pampered every day .She too has had her frolic in the sun but still a faithful companion indeed . She owns my heart and it will be a great loss when she passes she will be so missed
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