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- carnival minds -

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fragile laughter, broken smiles,

     tempered, mirrored-confusion stares back,

- licking dirty prints from frozen windows -

 

 

cracking fevers conscience,

     firepit-blown-shards, shattering carnival minds,

- flavorful colours dance in angers glow -

 

 

set forth your steps, onward pace,

     stained footprints slow cogs in tiffany time,

- glass houses vibrate from screams etched -

 

 

plated and beveled,

     my soul mingles within sands furnace,

- close our curtains of fear,

                            ....watchful eyes pierce this double-pane -

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

5. A world where everything is made of glass,

                                         ....even the creatures

 

                                                   ........even................our souls -

 

 

Carnival = Glass from the 1920's with blue, purple, red, green and violets -

 

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  • Draig aine gold member
    November 18, 2008
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    through a glass darkly love it


  • Swan song gold member
    September 2, 2008

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    - glass houses vibrate from screams etched -
    This was the grabber for me in this poem.
    Overall pretty darn good for sure!!!!


  • 2lullabyhaven
    August 21, 2008

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    Extremely potent...taking the reader to another level. Congrats on your trophy and on your write lol


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    August 18, 2008

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    Such intense and vivid metaphors, Brother Bear...wow!
    This is an OUTSTANDING piece!
    I wish you the very best of luck in this contest!
    Much love,
    Sandy


  • Patpowers silver member
    August 18, 2008

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    Another great work!

    Enjoyed this one again Arkbear! Nice way with the metaphors and the picture in this. Hope everything is all right. GOOD WORK MY FRIEND!!


  • Darkwell
    August 18, 2008

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    i love this

    the metaphors of glass are awesome

    fragile laughter, broken smiles, stained footprints

    such a lovely rhythm an i can hear like chimes in my head when i read it.

    a triumph WTG! good luck in the contest




    • Arkbear gold member
      August 18, 2008
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      Thank you

      Love the Prompts given.....thanks for the opportunity to pen for one....God bless,

      Bear ~

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