Paint me up
pretty
with red rouge roses
to set off
the lips I bit
over and over
to make them apple slices.
Sheath me in silk
and satin
and make me shimmer.
Parade me proudly
in front of the Gentry,
my eyes even
with the floor tiles.
"Smile, beautiful girl."
You murmur
lifting my chin,
chaste kiss on the cheek.
Blooming, bursting,
my smile appears,
because you want it to be there.
Gentry clap your shoulder
and their hands
at my face, so ready
to please them all,
my mind privately praying
my glass smile
doesn't break.
Author notes
This was mostly inspired by the books I've been currently reading, a series by Phillipa Gregory; Wideacre, The Favored Child, and Meridon.
Option 3, Glass Smile
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A contest entry
- Bring Me Your Wicked by XpushXmeXagainX.
875 points, ended October 6, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this is a wonderful piece of writing, perhaps, more prose than poetry, but nonetheless, MOST well done. Very, very fine all around. I loved it a ton and a half! bravo...
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Enjoyed this expositional walk toward approval. Beautiflly renderd with all the trappings enforced by sociatal perversions of whats important. Well written! Geo
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Apple slices huh? Damn. Now THAT'S a metaphor. I like this one because you subtly get your point across very clearly without "gushing." That takes skill. I also love your alliteration. I'm kind of a freak about alliteration (among many other things).
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Faceshatter?
Nice write.
I like the line about the eyes being even with the floor tile.
Thanks.
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wow woman. this was super powerful.
i love the way you write
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Awww pancake, i actually enjoyed reading this but then anything that actually displays any true human emotion generally gets me.
Nice write jailbait, keep it up
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Awww, thanks. :]
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My pleasure
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I thought the ending on this was wonderful, the image of a breaking smile is really powerful. The description in the piece really shows how sometimes our smiles are there just because that is what others want and I particularly liked the first six lines, I thought that was a really strong opening. Great work x
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