Wrapped in silk,
is how my body feels around you as I fall into your charming ways
Held tight in your arms,
whilst you caress me with sweet words spoken throughout the days
My love, show me your devotion of such surreal bliss,
tell me with one loving kiss to forever be engraved upon my lips
Swing me around and look into my eyes,
windows to my soul that offer no lies
An enchanting flame dances about,
in our spirits deeply in love
Hold me close,
my mind, body and soul are eternally yours,
dearest lover, I dedicate myself to you, as you own no flaws
I sought so long for a man like yourself,
I’m very thankful to have found hope through life’s journey; a road
Through the seasons,
of autumn, spring, summer and winter,
love’s deep embrace promised forever,
our dual connection won’t prevail to wither
Author notes
This was a little difficult to write as you usually do need to feel certain emotions to compose a style of poetry. But I had a good putting it together, even though it dosent relate to me today in anyway, only from past memories.
A contest entry
- Sensual Delights (ADULTS ONLY) by Dusty Rose.
950 points, ended September 3, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very nice. I think that poetry can only come alive from past memories, present reality, and future dreams. So you did well to take a past memory and bring it to life. A pleasure to read. And thank you for entering...
Dusty
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Thanks for your comment
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Very well written and a new sense of direction from your usual dark poeticism, but this new light is promising. The imagery in this particular write was astounding, like candy to my eyes with every line. You have outdone yourself in this write little sis, bravo!
Silvos.
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Thanks bro
It was a bit difficult to compose as I havent got anyone but I just used feelings from my past to create this, lol.
Thanks again.
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I liked the use of imagery and descriptive detail you use to communicate the feelings of the poetic voice towards the subject. As has already been said this is slightly different from what I've read in the past but good for you - nice use of metaphor. One very minor crit, lines 2 and 4 seem long and make it more prose than poetry, perhaps you might want to have a play about with some of the line arrangements? Anyway I did like the tone and mood behind this. Good luck in your contest. Thanks for sharing and for going outside the familiar, we should all do it more.
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Thanks for your constructive sentiments on my poetry, it's greatly appreciated.
I love your comments dearly
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This was a nice change, Emily.
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that was sweet
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