Chaffed lips crease in
half-hearted attempts for
happiness; melted sand
molded over candy smiles-
waiting for someone to whisk
her away...
Whisk me away!
Author notes
Option 3--> *Glass Smile
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I loved this, I thought you really painted the picture of that sort of fake smile that we can all put on sometimes. I loved the phrase "melted sand molded over candy smiles", I thought that was a really nice unique way to use the prompt and to tie in the title. The enjambement words really well and I thought the ending was great. Wonderful Work x
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