I've never dreamed a dream like this
So crystal clear and pure
Never before was I so secure
In the arms of someone I'd never met
It felt so good to love again
Almost, as if, I lived again.
But the camera finally caught me
Indulging in such silent sin
That I never wished to admit to myself
My hour on prime-time was soon to be over
If it were up to me, I'd never let go.
Summer morning, a cold sweat
My heart pounding, I accepted myself.
Author notes
rizzie
A contest entry
- Semi-Quickie- Prompts; 15 entries by perfectsunset.
450 points, ended September 3, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Reason Why =) by incondite.
700 points, ended September 24, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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very, very appealing to the sences
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Summer morning, a cold sweat
My heart pounding, I accepted myself <<< i loved these lines, they were a very sweet end to a very emotional poem
great write
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wow this is such a lovely twist...about you loving yourself and accepting yourself...great work and i love how you write about never having really met yourself..because it certainly can feel like that the more we get to truelly know and accept ourselves, its like wow, who've i been pretending to be.
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Wonderful!
dear R,
This poem leaves a lot to the imagination and yet
touches on the heart of things as well...
The words flow into each other and are honest
and forthright. Good poem! Brava! Jane
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User name in the author's notes please.
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Beautifully written...
"But the camera finally caught me
indulging in such silent sin"
good work.
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Great poem Rizzie, I really like this. I agree with what perfectsunset says, in that it is a great metaphor and has wonderful imagery - nice one.
best wishes as always
Autumn Whisper
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Wow; this was amazing. Love the direction in which you took this prompt. Great metaphor & lovelyimagery. Deep thoughts & elaborations.
Wonderful write!
Best of luck & thank you for entering
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