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Invasion


First rays of morning
elude sylvan defenses
pursuing shadows.

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Prompt: http://allpoetry.com/contest/2416807

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  • headintheclouds
    November 22, 2008

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    This is short deep beautiful and explicit. I like how its only 3 lines but its well written and you chose your words well. Thank you for writing it and taking time to thnk about this. I love reading these sort of poems!

  • Topnotchsy
    September 3, 2008

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    I think you absolutely nailed the prompt, and I had a very similar, very vivid image in my head before clicking on the link. Best of luck in the contest, I imagine this should do quite well.

    • kraazk05
      September 3, 2008
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      Thanks for the comment. I hope it does indeed do well!


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    August 26, 2008

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    I like!

    I am a Haiku fan of course and yes I think you hit the prompt fairly well, I'm not sure that I did, but your piece flows nicely and I think it is good. Best of luck in the contest. mandie


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    August 24, 2008

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    Humm..this is imaginative piefce indeed bringing the depth and the wonderful scenario alongwith..well done...


  • sassykitty
    August 20, 2008

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    OOOH I do like this! It creeps up then invades the senses beautifully. Great choice of words, you've really got this style nailed, I'm envious as I always take an hour to say what you can in a minute - metaphorically of course. Great imagery going on here. Good luck in the contest, you should't need it!

    • kraazk05
      August 20, 2008
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      Thank you kindly. It's not a haiku contest, so we'll see how it goes


  • xPink-Lotusx
    August 20, 2008

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    Very good write here. It says a lot for being such a short write. This was a great take on the prompt. I love the word usage, that was the deal breaker for me. Well written, and very good on the prompt.. Good luck to you!


  • Fedrizzi
    August 20, 2008

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    it gives me a sense that morning is comming to vanquish the uncertainty that shadow's leave with them in their darkness, just how this poem struck me

    The poem is indeed unique =)
    and depending on the reader, can say a huge amount for 3 tiny lines

    I give ye props =)
    and good luck in the contest!


  • FelineMuse
    August 20, 2008

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    I like the use of the word "sylvan." I think the poem does address the prompt, in a unique manner. The haiku is an excellent form for such a subject.

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