You threw me a lifeline
then yanked it back
and I drowned
beneath your tide
of indifference.
I felt like a gull
feathers plucked,
left bald
upon superficial sands.
And water now bleeds,
the end,
like the crucifixion,
but the hands I had to clasp
were a fickle mask
of an egocentric generation.
What a fool,
to be caught behind
fans of trivial banter,
meaningless rhetoric
from a flimsy kite
of piddling trifles.
Author notes
Prompt - Shallow
A contest entry
- I hope I never feel this... by Cannonsfire.
1750 points, ended August 21, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Done with flare and great metaphor in this, I enjoyed the entire piece and I especially loved the end lines. May have to use 'piddling trifles' lol
C
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This is a very well cafted poem, with all sorts of perfect metaphoric twists
And water now bleeds,
the end,
like the crucifixion,
but the hands I had to clasp
were a fickle mask
of an egocentric generation.
Those are my favorite lines. Though there aren't any which aren't favorites.
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