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But A Breath Away

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Chills touch the spine,

as energy will sway.

Memories don't fade,

but a breath away.

 

Holding on to love,

as love does not dissolve.

Attracted to vibration,

when physical revolves.

 

As two are as one,

one will not depart.

Connected eternally,

by feelings of the heart.

 

Silent presence,

can be known.

When in need,

signs are shown.

 

Love eternal,

will forever stay.

Emersed in energy,

but a breath away.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    September 25, 2008

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    I like your poem and do agree love goes on forever thank you very much for taking the time to enter my contest be well


  • storiesuntold gold member
    September 22, 2008

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    Beautiful write here

    So true for if love is forever given when vows are spoken the yes love is But a breath away . Hold it as though it were a piece of fine chinna a love so cherrished never fades


  • poetrandy
    September 4, 2008
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    Very sweet poem!

    I think butterflies are simply beautiful -- i feel somehow they can connect the living and dead! Don't know why -- just feel that way, perhaps some eastern religion has chanted this or something. Back to your poem, it's lovely. I like the title, of course, the subject, the treatment and the rhymes! This poem is filled with feelings and deep, heart felt, time honored images. I love it! Very good work!


  • Moonlightdragon gold member
    August 29, 2008

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    inspirational write

    "Love eternal,

    will forever stay.

    Emersed in energy,

    but a breath away. "

    as whispered into my mind by a angel
    Light and love
    Robert








  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    August 23, 2008

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    This butterfly is made from clay,
    painted with my liner brush,
    but a symbol of the gentle breath,
    the signs that are shown to you.

    A beautiful expression
    of a difficult concept.

    Aesthete


  • Malabu
    August 22, 2008
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    love this inspirational song...uplifting as is your heart spills upon pages here...love and light...and i think not the burdens filling the gloom...but the budding flower...fragrant to air and the heart swells with joy....suggestion...lol...check your caps hun...practice makes perfect
    love your poem
    mal


  • maa gold member
    August 20, 2008

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    after reading, re-reading, re-re-reading, re-re-re-reading etc. your verse, I slowly feel the deeper meaning invade my whole being ... I am very slow and intuitive when it comes to reading poetry, I somehow connect with a poem with a sort of hosepipe, and wait what happens ... sometimes, I get soaked immediately, and sometimes I have to wait until God decides to open the faucet ... sometimes, insight only comes to me in a gentle haze, sometimes drop by drop ... but it surely comes ! it's just a matter of time ...

    okay, what I received here was "if I am at ONE with all that IS, where can anyone really go?"

    also, concerning the signs, while I was reading the poems in the print-version on my terrasse yesterday, a little birdie was stroking my left cheek while flying onto the tree ... it seemed surprised and a bit scared afterwards, but who knows, either was I transparent or bathed in the halo of grace flowing from the poems (through the poems) ... a message from claude ? from God ? magic, like the rainbows in your bathroom ...

    "breath" has a very deep meaning for me, more than the literal sense it evokes in most ... I had several dreams where I was drowning in the sea, and each time I held my breath (even in my sleeping body), until either a dolphin or my spiritual mother appeared and told me that I could breathe ... "dying" did not hurt in these dreams (past-life-souvenirs ?) ...

    sending you much love and gratitude,
    marion rainbowsister


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    August 18, 2008
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    An excellent composition--

    Very Well Done!
    Best of Luck in the contest!

  • Ace - LightWithinMe
    August 18, 2008

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    Hello.

    I think this piece is written well. I do like the reference resonance, law of attraction, like attracts like. And I do agree with the endless nature of true love. There are some things I do not agree with in this write, neither here nor there really pertaining to you of course, hahah. I felt you stayed within the structure defined, and your rhythm and rhyme was done well. I hope your piece has the desired effect in the 'contest' entered. My regards.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    August 18, 2008
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    Outstanding!

    Purely beautiful composition, with stirring sentiments, perfect rhyme,rhyhtm, just outstanding sis!

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