pours on thick
like melted chocolate
over a strawberry
smooth
creamy
consuming the essence
whole
molding a form
of pure ecstasy
to be devoured.
A contest entry
- Forbidden Words of Love by Mr..
750 points, ended September 1, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow, the details in this was amazing!
very vivid and descriptive. made me imagine how it feels, how you told it in this great poem.
pours on thick
like melted chocolate
over a strawberry
smooth
creamy
that was a beautiful start to this.
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A Queen of Imagery
I gained weight with this one; seriously though, a wonderful piece with SO very many images hiding within. I love it.
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Paints a picture in my head, like real poetry should! Love it!
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Re: Surrender
WOW! You have a wonderful short little, emotional poem here! I love it! Your choice of words is simply great! Great title and subject! Last line is also super! This comment is almost as long as your poem! Great work -- keep it up, dear!
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awwwwww so short yet so powerful.
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Very imaginitive, the way we look at love. "consuming the essence whole" When I shut my eyes and listened to this poem I was seeing the strawberry being covered in the chocolate completely, then eaten. On the love aspect, "molding a form of pure ecstasy" was brilliantly written, and I ate this poem up!
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MMM this was a sweet and delicious little piece, I'm in the mood for lashings of chocloate now .... there goes the diet dammit
Lol 
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delicious! that's all i can say about this sweet write. Good luck in the contest.
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Surrender
Will you ever surrender to someone?
This sounds like something everyone should experience.
The removal of the chocolate and strawberry could be a lot of fun.
A very good write--You have the talent to paint picture in the readers mind.
bw
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Powerful diction here that indeed conjures up something, delectable.
All the best,
mj.
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mmm, yummy. very sensual in it's deliciousness.
Shoot, now I'm hungry, lol
XD
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WOW! Awesome poem! I haven't seen the contest specifics yet, but from the title, i think that this poem would be awesome in it! i love the ending. Hope you do awesome in that contest!
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Sounds delicious.
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Damn!
Waiter! I'll have what she's having! l.o.l.
whew, hot imagery! good stuff woman.
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This is good enough to eat
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