im thinking of a certain someone or something
&& my head is screaming for answers i cant find
this empty space is spreading like a black hole in the sky
&&i cant forget how your lips felt on mine...
or your fingers on the curves of my body.
Sometimes i wish you would touch me again.
feel something like the emotion we created many years back...
all i have are these pictures of you and I,,
how can so much memory be held in so little an image??
I have one question;
Do You Remember What It Felt Like To Be In Love With Me?
Author notes
it sucks.
but i wanted to enter something.
i feel like ive been gone for so long..
A contest entry
- Write Now by She Stole My Voice.
300 points, ended August 21, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
i dunno. just some random shit.
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Questioning love is a part of loving; you can’t fully love a person without questioning your own motives…
Now when you say you love someone think this…
‘Do I truly love you?’
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very enlightening.
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thanks for the comment.
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[[alexsis]]
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"this empty space is spreading like a black hole in the sky
&&i cant forget how your lips felt on mine...
or your fingers on the curves of my body"
wow. i really think this one is great.
its full of emotion, and it made me tear up a little bit,
knowing that i've felt this way.
this definitely doesn't suck.
you did a good job with this.
its realistic, and im sure alot of people can relate to it.
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thanks doll;;
comments like this one make writing all the more fun to do.
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[[alexsis]]
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This doesn't suck at all. I love it. I can really feel the emotions in here and relate to them. Reading this brings back memories for me. I really love the last line. You're a brilliant writer doll.
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thank you doll face.
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[[alexsis]]
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The beginning was my favourite part, the words fell off the lips and each phrase slipped into the next like it was just meant to be. The ending is a question many of us want to know but never really get an answer as we rarely can ask. Good write.
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i miss your comments bebe.
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Well hey you. I liked it, but at the same time, I thought some of the imagery was a little cliché. But I love the "empty space" line so much and the "fingers" line. Though the ending is alright, it's not the best minx. I'm loving it, but I also am thinking some of the imagery needs an overhaul. It is quite sad and for that, you have hit my heart...I just wish the whole poem was as effective as some of the imagery. At least I'm honest babes, which I know you will appreciate.
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oh god. this is definitely not my best just something spur of the moment and needing to get off my chest.
but i love your honesty so keep it coming whenever i fail miserably.
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LOL. I knew you wouldn't be upset with me.
I just hate passing out flowers, when I feel a piece could be improved. It is good to get things off your chest though...I hear you there babes.
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Hmm.
I can feel the emotion;
the sadness and the longing in this.
I love the way you wrote it.
Thank you for entering and good luck ♥
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its not my best but i wanted to enter something just for you.
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Aww thank you darling <33
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