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heart shaped decor

and I have it folded into a heart
duct taped to the wall
I keep it there as a reminder
that you are way too far gone

I couldn't even tell you
what it says anymore
I couldn't even tell you
how it ends...

I think it's gathering dust,
I try not to look at it.

you left before I could give it to you
and you never gave me that kiss...

at 2:45
you called me
and said this was it






I'm lost now and
dumbstruck....









you're back in town...

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wow
this was a really good prompt

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  • maggy1126
    August 21, 2008

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    such a sad story... I think we have all been there before.. loving someone and having them not returned it hurts like hell...
    and I have it folded into a heart
    duct taped to the wall
    I keep it there as a reminder
    that you are way too far gone


  • Hell In Harmony
    August 18, 2008
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    oh yea, here

  • Hell In Harmony
    August 18, 2008

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    I'm lost now and
    dumbstruck....









    you're back in town...


    i liked the prompt

    maybe ill give it a shot

    you make me wanna write again?

    good ending.


    • written-in-ink
      August 19, 2008
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      yay
      yeah it was a really good prompt...
      i actually took the letter of the wall and read it today...


  • cherrylollypop
    August 18, 2008
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    loved it much!


  • etoile
    August 18, 2008

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    duck taped to the wall
    should be duct taped

    and I have it folded into a heart
    duck taped to the wall
    I keep it there as a reminder
    that you are way too far gone
    ---
    i love that stanza

    wow. i just love the ending.


  • Venugopal gold member
    August 18, 2008

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    feeling expressed elegantly. It is frequent happenning, when others take other for granted. Nicely done

  • withoutlove13
    August 18, 2008

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    I couldn't even tell you
    what it says anymore
    I couldn't even tell you
    how it ends...

    /\
    I love thos lines, even more just "I couldn't even tell you
    how it ends..."

    I would have loved to see this more in depth, it sounds like an excellent story.
    thank you for entering =]


    • written-in-ink
      August 18, 2008
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      aww thanks

      it is

      its a complicated story...
      that im dealing with even today...


  • Arkaengel
    August 18, 2008

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    Woo!

    I'm lost now and
    dumbstruck....
    you're back in town...

    Thats a good ending

    i like!

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