And I can't remember just why
the ink was smudged
over the words "come home."
but i stared long enough at the paper
to know it was never good enough to send
your way, whatever way that may be.
somehow the words "i miss you"
just didn't have the same ring,
when written so clearly on the stationary.
And "i love you"
signed, unmistakably, at the end
would never be enough
to bring you back to me.
A contest entry
- The letter that never arrived. by withoutlove13.
450 points, ended August 27, 2008, 20 entries
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Comments
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i like this a lot!
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that was such a sad poem.. I can really feel what you were feeling when you wrote it..
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I like this. I never like sappy, flowery love schmudge. I like this because it is real, it is clear which gives it more imagery than if all of the useless cosmetic verbiage had been used. This is a great write.
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Awww, this has such a sadness to it... Lost love - when nothing is EVER good enough... Nice take on the prompt - I hope this never truly happened to you, as it is heartbreaking...
Overall, an excellent emotional write
Amber -
aww this was sad
especially the end
goodluck in the contest
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Aww, this poem was actually very sad to me. I think you did a wonderful job, I loved the way you opened it.
My favorite part was "but i stared long enough at the paper
to know it was never good enough to send
your way, whatever way that may be." Great job and good luck
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Very touching It portrayed a real pushing and pulling of inner emotions.. great job
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When I was reading this, I was listening to a song that seemed to match it so well. the song was Night drive by Chromatics.
anyway this was well written, and the last two lines grabbed me.
great job!
thank you for entering
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