As you lay in my bed
The dryer going in the background
Your soft breathing in my ear
I can't help but fall in love with you
With your lips slightly parted
Arm caressing my body
Stealing just one more glance
Restraining myself from kissing you
I want to tell you here and now
I never want you to leave
You've done such a great job
At making me fall head over heels
I love everything you do
Touching me gently
One wrong move I'll break
And the way you look at me each morning
I can see myself waking next to you
I can see myself holding you
I can see myself making love to you
Every morning for the rest of our lives
Author notes
This was written recently as well. Just wrote what came to mind. If theres anything I can improve on this poem let me know...haven't written in awhile, kinda rusty.
What do you think I could improve?
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I want to tell you here and now
I never want you to leave
You've done such a great job
At making me fall head over heels
that is SO cute!
I love the imagery and all the little details in this poem
brilliant
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D'aww thanks
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i liked this seems its been a while since ive gotten to read anything new from anyone lol.how u been?
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amazing. so sweet! i really liked this one. i decided to read some more of your work after reading your piece 'five [wonderful?] years' off the shameless promotion list. and from one north american 18 year old to another, i just wanted to tell you i very much enjoyed reading this write. it's so romantic. *sigh* lovely. may peace go with you
~shadowlyn
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D'awww thank you! Much appriciated! XD
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Hello
Hey this poem is good It's very romantic and rather sweet with that fresh innocence that gets so easily lost.. hmm improvements? this could flow alittle better so maybe play around with the wording and structure to let it flow more of the tongue and thats about all i can think so keep penning, and be safe
-kitty xxx -
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Thanks for the comment and the suggestions Ill work on it a bit and see if i cant improve that.
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