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Just Friends

Here I lay
ALone in my bed again
Thoughts of you
Racing through once more

Wishing for the night
When you hold me tight
Saying it will all be okay
And we are more than just friends

I long for your lips upon mine
Your fingers on my skin
Your body against mine
Our breating in sync

I say I love you
You take it as a friend
When all I want
Is you to know it's more

And here I lay
Alone in my bed again
Thoughts of you
Racing through once more

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  • schwartzwald
    December 9, 2008

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    how cute...

    I kind of been in that situation, I once loved someone, she took it as a friend thing, then she and I got together then broke up and here I am, an emo kid.


  • Pretty Girl
    August 25, 2008

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    Awesome

    I said something like this to the person I once loved but know we are only friends. I like the part And here I lay alone in my bed again thoughts of you racing through once more. This poem is exactly how I feel in real live I know that the person i love knows we are more than just friends. I love the title it flows with the poem and makes it unique and good. I think you should add more to the poem either way it is or would be good. Maybe add what you think he feels or what you would like him to feel. great job keep up the good work.


  • Curious LiLi
    August 17, 2008

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    Awwww.
    It makes me want to cry.
    To love and not loved back, sucks.
    I'm feeling it right now.

    Great write, by the way!