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limbo





I breathe you in
like a smoky atmosphere.

I count the sparks of white
that dot your eyes

and line

a purple sky,
fading to pink
on the horizon.





Author notes


Thirty words.
"Twilight"

And eyes that burn like
cigarettes...

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  • SuicidalLover
    August 21, 2008

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    So very realistic, I saw what you wrote come alive. That's very hard to do.
    ~Kystal Angel


  • etoile
    August 18, 2008

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    i love this
    its beautiful
    the imagery is amazing
    i love the words you used

    lots of luck in the contest