Come to me, breathe,
oh, resilient ray of light;
seep into the portal,
cross the divide and shake my wings.
I now only taste bitter in the morning.
Where has all the joy gone?
My words feel like wet rags
used again & again to sop up blame.
You paved the path last and said,
just let go the heavy weight of night,
and fly.
But it is so far away
and I can't find direction anymore,
of love, sans hope;
all is falling into disrepair
and I have lost my hold.
Can this curled body find relief
in just one distant song, remembered
from the front row of memories melody?
I can still feel that tingle from a tear
and I'm amazed at the way
life ebbs and flows,
knowing fragile minds can't keep it safe,
for my depth is dangerously diaphanous
like flustered butterfly's wings.
So learned light of resourcefulness
sing me sweetly into tune,
for I am harmony unglued,
left to scatter,
seeking breeze to fly again
as I wander aimlessly,
searching for some needed peace.
Author notes
A contest entry for: some examples of distance
your prompt is distance... http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/distance
Quote inspirations: Courtesy of Nicolette & Allyce.
Love doesn't hide.
It stays and fights. It goes the distance,
that's why love is so strong. So it can carry you all the way home.
~ Anon
Human beings, vegetables, or cosmic dust,
we all dance to a mysterious tune,
intoned in the distance by an invisible player.
~ Albert Einstein
Picture: "golden mist" Courtesy of "Google Image Search"
A contest entry
- some examples of distance by Nicolette.
1500 points, ended September 1, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This made me think of personal detachment, and I'm glad to find it here in the contest. People have had many different takes on the prompt, and I think one of the most jarring examples of distance is the distance from self.
"seep into the portal,
cross the divide and shake my wings"
This really is touching, especially your use of "portal" - it lingers.
Thank for for sharing
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"remembered from the front row of memories melody" - I liked that... and I also liked your take on the contest prompt, as well as the very personal voice here. This poem almost reads like a prayer, a prayer to the self, to light.... to chase away the darkness that has moved in...a coming home to the self. Lovely poetry with some very nice phrasing and images. Thank you for sharing it with us in the contest.
~ Nicolette
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You have wonderful metaphores in this poem. The imagery was really well done also. I really liked this verse for some reason:
"I can still feel that tingle from a tear
and I'm amazed at the way
life ebbs and flows,"
The descriptiveness is great. Very nicely written!
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Life's ebbs and flows are what make it interesting though. You did a great job creatively describing life with wonderful metaphore. Nicely penned.
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Nice job!
You are truly artistic with your words. You pen them as a painter would paint upon canvas! Beautiful job.
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Wow!
This Is Amazing. It's So Deep -
A good write and a pleasure to read. Kind of sad to feel the loss of our wings huh? Have been there way too many times...always knowing that like everything else...this to shall pass.
nevadapoet
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Bravo!!
You did a wonderful job with this piece.. the imagery and the flow were just flawless!!! so beautiful!! it was a soft read.. I loved it.. Thank you very much for sharing.. and best of luck in the contest!
Angel
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Superb plus
Wow, extremely well written. For some reason it reminds me of an old song: "Both Sides Now", recorded both by Judy Collins; Joni Mitchell and others. I really liked your imagery. A link in a moment for the lyrics: http://www.oldielyrics.com/lyrics/judy_collins/both_sides_now.html -
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Thanks for the kind comment and the link
Yeah... I can see the connection, 'specially
"It's life's illusions I recall
I really don't know life at all"
...So true, so true!
Later, Friend.
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You are quite welcome, my friend.
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very beautifully written
full of despair and a bit of hope
lovely
God bless...
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Good write. i love the word choice. Beautiful piece.
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