Precognition

With no ebb of evensong,
beside light's limbo;
glow binds heart to parity,
in fleeting days of summer.

I remember what is yet to occur,
and groom ready soft sparkle.

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Prompt~ Twilight

Rules:
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30 words exactly

A contest entry

Quickie~ 30/30/24 by SuicidalLover. 600 points, ended August 22, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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etoile
August 18, 2008
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this is amazing
goodluck in the contest
kiwigirljacks
August 18, 2008

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Why can't I write like this!!!

Ahh.. "what is yet to occur" .. such a feeling of soft anticipation in this!

Tis beautiful bro!
Cannonsfire
August 17, 2008
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Tis loverly
MysticalRayne
August 17, 2008

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Beautifully written ~ then again all your writes are ~ best of luck
Misery
August 17, 2008
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Simple yet complex...Your words have a great flow...Beautiful...

-Victoria
notorious
August 17, 2008

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Jesus Christ, I kept refreshing the allpoetry.com page just WAITING for someone to write something new...

and you did.

"ebb of evensong"
Damn, that is gorgeous.

"light's limbo"
I ADORE the possessive form (especially since you didn't do 10 in 1 poem...)
Soft alliterative-ness is done EXCEPTIONALLY well my friend.

"fleeting days of summer"
Grr, I don't want to go back to school.

"I remember what is yet to occur"
Wow. This is something I could imagine somebody reading out loud 100 years from now.

'tis deep.

"and groom ready soft sparkle"
I actually don't think you need a line after the AWESOME "I remember what is yet to occur". I think it's more intriguing and phantastic (haha) w/o this last line.

Good luck in this contest.
I could only think of the stupid ass vampiric series Stephanie Meyer wrote with the prompt...

THOSE BOOKS SUCK SHIT

Loved this.