Burnt skies dance above
shadows of the day
leaving a little bit of sunlight
with a little bit of darkness
in my heart,
because
you’re my limbo,
you’re my twilight.
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Prompt= Twilight... in Thirty Words
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A contest entry
- Quickie~ 30/30/24 by SuicidalLover.
600 points, ended August 22, 2008, 15 entries
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How is the sun faring in my merry isle? I remember, because of your write, sitting beside a river in Scotland at 3 am with my wife in my lap, wondering if the glow ever diminished. Thanks.
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Beautiful imagery with a melancholy sentiment. Great job, especially in its economy of words!
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the first five lines are especially good
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this is really really pretty, I went to highlight and quote the whole piece when I realised I prolly shouldn't do that
again, I love your strong imagery, it's something I can see you do really well.
♥
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rather a bittersweet state to be in.
Very good poem, short, which I like and easy to understand.
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Hehehe. YAY for Twilight. *can't wait for the movie*
Anyway - if it wasnt actually about the books its still a great poem.. And congrats on almost getting 100 comments in a day. Keep going! you're almost there!!! another 50 or so and you will have gold for a week!!!
Sorry, only slightly bored here.. And rambling to a complete stranger.
So I'm going to go now and it is a great poem. Keep it up...
Claire-Anne
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wow this is very good short and to the point
nice job
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this is a good poem!!! have a nice day, -slick99
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Very simple, but the emotions more than makes up for it. Played nicely towards the end, connecting the thoughts.
~Kystal Angel
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ooh i like it
the imagery is amazing
best of luck in the contest
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Wonderful
Very creative and so well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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