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Moonlight Has Vanished

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Moonlight has vanished where did the night go?
Upon the shores of life, we ride the moonlight
bringing in the sunlight, we watch it glow. 

Sun is kissing the moon goodnight, real slow,
yet the sun is shining brightly in sight.
Moonlight has vanished where did the night go?

Life has struggles for in which we shall grow,
for by the end we shall find comfort and light
bringing in the sunlight, we watch it glow.

Wisdom within us encourages flow,
and darkness will no longer claim the fight.
Moonlight has vanished where did the night go?

Beauty is displayed between the times show
when sun hugs moon light, we observe the sight
bringing in the sunlight, we watch it glow.

Colors entwine nicely above and below
between heart and soul they line up just right.
Moonlight has vanished where did the night go?
bringing in the sunlight, we watch it glow.

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A contest entry for:
PIF Villanelles only
PIF, villanelles only. I just won a Gold and am paying it forward. Prewrites allowed. NO LOVE, LOST LOVE, RELIGIOUS, OR SUICIDE POEMS.
by ecrivain01

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moonrise over laguna by Eric Foltz

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  • Swan song gold member
    August 31, 2008
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    You are simply beautiful and every way shape and form that is all that needs to be said.

  • ecrivain01
    August 19, 2008

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    This is good ...

    but this line stopped me cold:

    Sun is kissing the moon goodnight, real slow, (real slow is not possible in English - it has to be really slow, but I'd have said "very slow")

    otherwise, this is quite a good job.


    • PassionsPromise gold member
      August 19, 2008
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      I know but it wouldnt of fit the syllable count oh whaaaaaa!
      LMAO thanks for your critique.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    August 18, 2008

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    O' sweet baby! your words are like a beautiful song playing ever so softly on this heart of mine...sighs...you amaze me


  • Griswold silver member
    August 17, 2008

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    Wonderfully done Villanelle honey, must have been hard to stay away from love or erotic for you in this form I know it is for me in this form. Love you baby, best of luck...Scott


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    Very different from you!

    Great stuff, I think I shall give this one a miss

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