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[ The rise and fall ]

The rise and fall
Of night and day
Like breathing
In and out
Steady as if
Lost in slumber
So sweet
Does the universe sleep?
Through joy and heartache?
Through peace and war?
And if it does sleep,
How will it be awaken?
And what will happen
To night and day?

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um... yeah, just found this lurking in my notebook, so thought I'd put it up

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  • Ez Writer silver member
    February 2

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    A stunning write delightfully executed
    and thought provoking ! Any more - lurking
    in your notebook ?
    Best wishes & hugs ! Friend Easy


  • Curtkf
    August 26, 2008

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    Glad you found it

    Great imagery in this one, I really like the combination of breathing and sunrise/sunset. Maybe lose the "be" in line twelve to help the flow? A really good piece, keep them comming at us, will you?