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The Big Tumble

He imagined the look on the fat man’s face
As he turned to run away;
The look of utter confidence
In his own poor abilities
As if he didn’t know that
The dweeby kid he decided to
Bully was really a Black-belt
Karate Master. The fat man
Approached with his evil sneer
And the dweeb slowly
Decided to fight
And a face off began.
The fat man made the first move;
A lunge as if to squish
The dweeb
But the dweeb was ready
With a jab to the gut and
A twist of his body
The fat man tumbled
Down the hill.

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  • dustookie2
    September 2, 2008

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    A different take on the prompt ... never know where the path will lead you but the poetic journey is always interesting. So the 'dweeb' won and it was the chicken after all.....good luck in the contest.


  • Roaddog Wolf
    September 1, 2008
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    I sort of lose something in the interpretation of this but it is over the 10 line limit anyway


  • Yorkshire Rose
    August 17, 2008
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    Lol!! thats cetainly somwthing you dont read every day