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Three Day Warning

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Three Day Warning

Three days from now she’ll make her presence known
And steer her bow as raging seas are blown
Preemptive silence screams her threatening vow
She’ll make her presence known three days from now

From winds of her encroach, our breath is still
Like a coach that’s racing down a hill
A screaming shrill announces her approach
Our breath is still, from winds of her encroach

She’s but a child, a child who’s lost her way
In tantrum wild her course has gone astray
Some preachers pray to deities defiled
A child who’s lost her way, she’s but a child

We hunker down, we watch the child mature
Our whole hometown in prayer for her detour
With broken crown some in her path will drown
We watch her grow in strength; we hunker down

 

 

 

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"hunker down" is an expression coined in Florida for "take cover".

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  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    September 7, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry in the contest. This is a pleasure to read as you use imagery and metaphor in your description of Mother Nature. Living where you do this must be a fairly common occurrence, you have expressed it well.

    All the best

    Sue and Jeff


  • maa gold member
    September 1, 2008

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    truly amazing ...
    this morning I was speaking with the hurricane, and told her that I understood her anger about humans abusing mother earth ... and like you, I was picturing her as a small child throwing quantums ...
    I know she has a job to do : making us more humble and respectful towards nature ... and I am sure that she won't scream as much if we weren't so deaf ...
    thank you for sharing this wonderful verse,
    and in case you feel inspired to go a step further and to maybe talk to the little child gustav or/and hanna, I'm sure you'd do an amazing job and highlight my current contest ...

    also, please update me on the current situation, are you safe ?

    much love,
    marion


  • buttheadsloon
    August 19, 2008
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    Swissssh!

    Little Fay
    she's but a child
    that only needed to drop
    a tear or two ... XX


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    August 18, 2008

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    you have given life to a fearful storm and made it seem as though a child...fear rides upon the waves and yet you my Little Blue Star have tamed...sighs...you amaze me so little love


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 18, 2008

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    WOW.. I just LOVE that Form!! OMG.. it's amazing!! This is such a fantastic poem! I can imagine it is hard to get that swap line sounding right... seessh... *is amazed*

    But anyway.. apart from the amazing form.. the poem itself is amazing.. gave me a chill thinking of how scary it must be waiting for something like that to come, not knowing how severe it is going to be...

    I hope all goes ok sis!!!!!

    you live in Florida then? I was in Tampa last November

    Fantastic poem!!!!


  • Skybow silver member
    August 17, 2008
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    Oh, be careful Amera, I pray you all are going to be safe.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    Nicely done cubbie, especially for a Weather buff like me

    i think you'll be fine over there, just don't go driving around for a while and stay inside with your cat.

    "hunker down" is also used in the Military when they know incoming is on its way or friendly artillery fire.

    Go stay in Savannah??

    take care and be safe.



    Dad


  • StarEyes
    August 17, 2008

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    STAY SAFE SIS!

    I hope this thing changes course, and you are missed! I have been through a few of them when I lived in Florida and they are terrifying! Please stay safe!! I will be praying for your safety!

    Now on this write, What a job you did on this one! I still have not mastered many forms, and this is one I am not sure I can ever master like you! This is amazing!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Rovingone gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    Only you can create a forboding piece of immortality from a fearful situation brewing. Amazing writing as always. I hope you weather the storm!


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    Peace and light rest upon your shores
    may the hand of the Almighty umbrella you
    May the love of all around ease some more
    of the worry thats soaring through/


    within thoughts and prayer you will be lifted
    and the angels will safely guide
    to the angel I find ever so gifted
    may He soften the paths you all ride.

    This was a wonderful piece as always

    Prayers and love be with you

    Love you

    Passions


  • echo-ink
    August 17, 2008

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    Holy shit, Amera,HUNKER DOWN.

    Loved the poem, it was fantastic, great metaphor, be safe, I'm thinking of you, and don't forget a survival bag. love ya much, Bell xx


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    This is exellent! Yet another new form to learn! This looks difficult and challenging but it will be fun to try one! Do you have a storm cellar to hide out in? Take cover! Seriously, I hope this passes you by without a hair out of place! Pam


    • Amera gold member
      August 17, 2008
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      aww... thank you that makes me giggle; we're two feet above sea level, no one has a storm cellar. No basements in south Florida. I do hav a storm proof house. My windows are just short of bullet proof.

  • Jade Jefferies
    August 17, 2008

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    A wonderful poem about a terrible event. I feel the swap quatrain form gives a repetitive emphasis that doubtless mirrors the way these warnings are heard where you live. In different orders at the start and end of each news broadcast and so forth. Nice try to claim "Hunker down" for Florida and I am sure it is very necessary there but my dictionary lists it as either Icelandic or Norse, maybe those ancient Vikings who discovered America got further down than is thought.
    Great poetry and all the very best of luck in the coming days. Wear heavy shoes if you go outside!


  • Faeryn
    August 17, 2008

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    And this is making me feel better how...? Amera, I'm really worried for you! Excellent poem. Stay safe. I'll pray for you.
    Love,
    Tay


  • And Hyetal
    August 17, 2008

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    My town is not only the horse capital of the US, but also the lightning capital of the US. I'm definitely dreading this storm.

    hmm. But I wonder if school will be canceled.



    Great write, Amera, and I love the internal rhyme. Definitely something I'd have trouble doing.

    ~Cassie


    • And Hyetal
      August 17, 2008
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      ooops, excuse me, I did more research and my city is horse capital of the world.


  • Melodies
    August 17, 2008

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    Oh, how truly penned by one who has seen nature's fury and knows the feeling of rising expectations. Beautiful writing, dear one.


  • PerVirtuous
    August 17, 2008

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    This is a wonderful poem and you are on my A AND my B teams and we can hunker down whenever you are ready. This form is so very difficult, and then you added internal rhyme, too. I fear it may go over the judges heads like a funnel cloud that never touches down. Just know that I realize it is a Gold class poem. (That and a dollar-fifty will buy you a medium bad coffee.) As always, this is thoughtful and brilliant. Have three more bunnies for your C team.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    August 17, 2008
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    Are you in the path of that thing Sis?


    • Amera gold member
      August 17, 2008
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      Yes and you gave me no bunnys to hunker down with.


      • Mairi bheag gold member
        August 17, 2008
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        Bunnies not functioning

      • Mairi bheag gold member
        August 17, 2008
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        Patience, Sis. Jings, why do all do all the women I love live in hurricane zones? Batten down the hatches, and take care.

        Bunnies, for your comfort will be on their way.


        • maa gold member
          September 1, 2008
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          hmmmmm, I don't live in a hurricane-zone ... does that mean that you don't love me ???


  • luna-midnight gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    this is wonderful amera lovely flow and powerful words
    good luck in the contest
    Stephanie ♥


    • Amera gold member
      August 17, 2008
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      Thank you; wish me luck for the hurricane.

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