my hands
touched the face of sky like dandelion
chasing the raving flame of your eyes
and for some uncanny reason
i didn’t mind murdering the hyena of my ego
that, now, laughs and cries at the same time
you raced your fingers
over my collarbone; sang
don’t eye the moon,
just sip down my breaths
don’t waste time
by dreaming
i couldn’t help;
i saw the horizon melting
in the dusk of dozing city
and nirvana was a new word
which fascinated
the wrinkles of my mouth
so I smiled
words, drifting time, you
and your fingers
made their way
into my bones
made a redwood
out of my body;
the roots
were gravitated by music,
bathed in desert
of confused stars.
i wish i knew-
love was dead-animal skin
that lust wore
Author notes
when i wrote half of this piece ^ while i was listening to this:
“adhura hu ab mein tere bina…
adhuri yeh jindegani rehi jaye gi”
(atif aslam, duri)
"i am incomplete without you now...
this life will stay incomplete"
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hahaha... i was a little confused with the words lust and love *oops face*
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Comments
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Very original imagery. Nicely done.
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nooo! i just deleted my comment D:
the whole thing read through very naturally, easily. there's no big mouthfuls. i love that about your writing, it's the way all good poetry should be.
the hyena image is great, on the other hand my ego is more of a sun god, lol
-cassidy
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which comment?
...lol don't worry about anything... sun god? RA? i loved that name as a kid... you are making me relive my past, lol... i feel old now.
i love your hair too!!! weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee! pretty cassidy! -
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haha i typed up my comment and then i accidentally highlighted and clicked delete... i am retarted sometimes
and yaaa! Ra is an awesome name
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lol... that happens to me at times... i right click and undo everything...
oh psh.. you are cute so everything is forgiven! (i am lame)
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lol I don't think there is any doubt you wrote both lust and love, sometimes they do get mixed and merged together and yes we are shallow thinking one is the other but hey that's what makes it all so appealing lol cos we can
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Genius. Come hither under my wing esha.
I will make the day a bright sky of
held together turtle doves and emerald
green space ships.
We can sing about the dead trees-
the crushed rabbit heads
and we can smile alive but
somehow unsure we ever missed the
beating of angel wings.
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lol... what wings i see no wings...
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The ones you and I have,
underneath our shoulder muscles.
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ahh... *shh-don't-tell-marc-look*
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LOL.
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excellent.
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Totally relatable.
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