She slapped me on the face,
Stabbed me where it deeply hurt.
Something within me broke down in a flash
And at that moment,
In the abyss of the fatal scene,
Sparkled tears shed light
To mountainous clouds of the now broken memories.
I remember the happiness and relief
Brought by her presence.
I remember the times she stood by me
When the world cast a heavy bomb,
When a stormy night speared my heart or
When my life took a ride downhill.
She took my hand and kept me going,
Gave me the courage I lacked,
And made me feel like a somebody.
But, on this wretched, reddened piece of land,
A wound surmounts the rest. Was it all a lie?
Had I been running away all along?
Had I worn a mask and shut out reality?
Had this sick game of frivolous love overthrown me?
This oppressive night butchered my life
Like no other before
And seeping down even more,
I think, life is all about misery,
Where’s my next one?
…And my puffy voice whispers the anguished words:
‘Come in.
All I’ve left is a splintered heart,
Do you want it?
...Sorry, it’s all I can give.’
Author notes
I submitted 2 poems.This and 'Butterfly to Lioness' for the contest MAKE ME FEEL
Thanks, Vanishing - - Soul
A contest entry
- Write me something that will touch my heart and soul in some way by Loveandblessings2u.
2000 points, ended September 5, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - MAKE ME FEEL by Cena-of-Destiny.
2750 points, ended October 17, 2008, 45 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me feeling by Cant force beloved.
700 points, ended December 10, 2008, 57 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me cry, make my heart hurt, show me your pain by starving-to-survive.
1900 points, ended February 9, 42 entries
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Comments
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Wow, what can i say! this is amazing. Your words are perfectly chosen, your emotion is so evident and strong. I am so sorry you feel this way and have to go through so much heart ache. I can relate to a lot of this. This is a heart breaking write, so full of honesty and pain.
Thank you so much for entering my contest and if you ever need to talk i am here for you -
Oh my god is all I can say. All of the poem is extremely well written but the ending is superb. The language is contained yet all the emotions can still be felt. This has to be one of my favourite poems.
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This is so heartbreaking,
very sad to say the least.
Your ending can make someone cry.
You have done a great job writing this piece.
But it is so painful to read.
Yet I am sure that many can relate to it.
Good luck in the contest.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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ouch i can feel the pain seeping from this write. the last stanza sums it all up perfectly and painfully. hard to live through yet beautifully expressed.
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