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Insatiable

 

 

 

 

Doesn't take much,

you know that as

teasing transitions into

vamp-like advances

 

you guide me with

an impish smile upstairs

where we are

not hard to find

as clothes lead a trail

straight to our bed.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 25, 2008

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    Soft and tantalizing!! Makes you want to know what came next...

    Gorgeous sensuality as always!!


  • michichoeret
    August 18, 2008
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    wow

    so well worded

    so incredibly sexy

    how do you always manage to make me so jealous


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    August 18, 2008

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    I came back to read your words again and to comment Now I don't know what to say. I just enjoy the imagery you create in few words, leaving a knowledge in what is to come without saying it.
    Love
    Juls


  • Solidified
    August 17, 2008

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    Description of impish smile and "vamp-like advances" are coy. I love the biting insinuation. That's what puts this poem into my happy place.


  • Dusty Rose
    August 17, 2008

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    I love how you left something to the imagination. This was very subtle, in a good way. And made me want more which is a good thing. Nicely done. And thank you so much fr entering.


    Dusty


  • Nicolette gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    This one just made me smile and reminded me of a poem that i've written that was very much along the same vein.... something like "follow me, i'm right behind you" Great job here, Michael.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Angelflower
    August 17, 2008

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    dad!!! it's just not right to think about stuff like that!!! Lol. not a good vision here!!! I think I'm blind!!! lol. You did a great job here though I really liked it..sensual and yet soft.. bravo!! best of luck with the contest.


    Angel


  • luna-midnight gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    hahaha, bad dad! this is a great short sensual write though
    good luck and take care
    Stephanie ♥


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    More of your softly sensual words to entice thoughts of evenings spent together with someone who can take you to the heights of pleasure. Now I'll have to go and chase up that man of mine.

    A brilliantly written take on the prompt.

    Best wishes in the contest.

    Love Margaret



  • Gwenevere
    August 17, 2008

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    MMMMM!!!! Now I wonder what you are up to .Great write for the prompt provided, don't trip up over your socks , Ros

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