I've got some crinkly wrinkly bits,
bet you've got some like me.
I got mine from the shop of life,
on buy one get one free.
I hadn't really noticed,
till I looked the other day.
Just how my crinkly wrinkly bits,
were getting their own way.
It seems to me I never know,
when one more will appear.
For every time I check to see,
they've snuck up from the rear.
They've got my smile surrounded,
built a fortress on my brow.
Yet to this day I just don't know,
Quite where, or when, or how.
But still they keep on coming,
and I'm very sure it's true.
These persistent crinkly wrinkly bits ,
I've paid for "just like you".
A contest entry
- Go For The Gold/Rhymers by piccola.
500 points, ended August 31, 2008, 37 entries
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Mal my dear friend i do not recall reading this one How did i miss it? Up to your usual standard I can see why you hold a high place on my favourites list Excellent
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What a delightful humor filled poem!!! The imagery is amazing. I loved the third verse! Thanks for sharing.
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lol... great work... our bodies all get older... the trick is to keep the mind young... im 36... not got any wrinkles yet but ill b proud of em when i get em... ill feel ive earned every one lol
hugs,
georgie,
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I love it.
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I enjoyed this poem, not only was it funny, and very cute, but it ryhmed well and that's important to me. Thanks for entering
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Excellent....
You're giving me some extra crinkly winkly bits around my eyes cuz your making me laugh...LOl
Yep, it's the old "school of life" for sure, but if they're crinkly winkly's that have accrued from happy and natural experiences, I reckon they add a bit of character... nice write
John
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This is really a nice take on wrinkles and how they appear almost over night. The rhyme was great and the flow was consistent throughout. Just one problem in the first stanza;
" I've got some crinkly wrinkly bits,
bet you've got some like me.
I got mine from the shop of life,
on buy one get one free.should that be buy one you get one free?
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Hi Piccola, It's the way we say it in Robin Hood country. We also call them Bogof deals. Lol...Thank you for the lovely comment...mal
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