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A day and night



A stolen meeting far away
A hotel room I booked by phone
A day and night where two can play
A single time I'm not alone
  A kiss a hug a slap and more
  A sigh a cry a sob a moan
  A different world outside the door
  A single time I'm not alone
A love we'll keep throughout the years
A day that we will always own
A memory to stave off tears
A single time I'm not alone
  A stolen meeting far away
  A single time I'm not alone

Author notes

A Kyrielle sonnet, 14 lines in iambic tetrameter rhymed abaB cbcB dbdB aB where the capital Bs represent a repeated line, you are also allowed to rhyme aabB ccbB ddbB aB.

I wrote it slightly differently and reworked it so that instead of most lines starting with A they all did, not sure it works but you can tell me

The picture is a contest prompt and was apparently retrieved from Google.

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 20, 2008

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    Oh this was so beautifully penned with passion, romance & love. I really liked how you made this a Kyrielle sonnet; you put a lot of work & time into this piece I can tell & it worked wonders.

    Gorgeously sensual!
    Amazing write!

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    Well done here.
    Enjoyed the piece now just tell me when
    will you be arriving????

    Ah well cant blame me.

    Love you
    Passions


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    August 17, 2008
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    Boffo!

    good stuff - best of luck in the contest.


  • lisapoet
    August 17, 2008

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    You did a good job. Nice flow. Stolen moments with hints of sadness. "Asingle time i'm not alone". Nicely done

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