While I watch you hurting over her,
my heart begins to ache once again.
I know you miss and love her a great amount,
but getting her back is going to take some time.
While I watch you fight your toughest battle,
I feel helpless being forced to the sideline.
With all my heart I want to assist you in some way,
but my efforts never seem to help in the slightest.
While I watch you try your hardest to not give up,
my instinct is to hold you and keep you close.
I never seem to fulfill my duties as your girlfriend,
maybe someday I'll fulfill them adequately.
I promise to be here for you until the very end,
rushing from the sideline to help you when you fall.
I guarantee that everything will be better and settle,
when you have finally won your toughest battle.
Author notes
This is for a very special person in my life, I hope he likes it.
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A contest entry
- for my favorites only---ok now its for everyone by Shelby K.
800 points, ended August 26, 78 entries
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it's a tough battle for the person of which this piece is about, but also a tough battle for the person watching on the sideline. To feel helpless to someone you care about is just as painful. It's very hard to try to help someone out when they're in pain and you brought that out so nicely. The flow of this piece was also done well in every stanza. Your cares for someone is a shinning light.
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This has good descriptions and a fine flow through-out, clearly demonstrating the helplessness we feel when someone we love is hurting, and there is little we can do... sad, but lovely.
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This is a personel note to someone though with the depth and the beauty of love is around the words of egffective poetry as well..thanks for sharing..well done....
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my instinct is to hold you and keep you close.
I never seem to fulfill my duties as your girlfriend,
maybe someday I'll fulfill them adequately.
I promise to be here for you until the very end,
rushing from the sideline to help you when you fall.
I guarantee that everything will be better and settle,
when you have finally won your toughest battle,
the start of these lands i thought were lovely but sad how devoted but upset you sounded, the last bit, 'rushing from the sideline' i found amazing this sounds like such an act of blind devotion even though it sounds like your hurting, the stanzas ive described make this poem ! i think there fantastic and being in a close situation like this myself i think you have done extremely well here pointing out the stress it causes, unbeleivable poem from an amzing writer -
this is all a true piece. one doesnt realize that their love for a friend is more so.
the sidelines are one place where true love can be held.
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you are so sweet for writing this.
honestly, it's the nicest thing in the world for you to want your friend to be happy
and you express your pain over watching his 'battle' very well.
nice write.
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i feel ya
feeling totally helpless
its terrible
great poem however! great work
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SWEET
aww, this is so sweet
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