Before I knew it
a single tear had crept
from my eye onto my cheek
rolling slowly as I wept
There I was crying
for no reason at all
One tear after another
they continued to fall
I could hardly believe it
nor could I make them stop
I was crying buckets
filling them to the top
This was out of control
my eyes had sprung a leak
not only was I crying
now my body was getting weak
Funny comes to mind
as I'm telling you this tale
I don't know how or why
I just started to whale
Out of nowhere now I was laughing
something was funny...I guess
uncontrollable laughter shook me
I was quite an awful mess
First the tears for no reason
and for no reason now the joy
I can tell you one thing...
this wouldn't happen to a boy
Copyright(c)2008 Alix Price
Author notes
Written about being a girl, 11 years old and going through puberty...what are hormones???
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetry Contest--For Children Up To Age 12 by kiwikrazi37.
450 points, ended August 25, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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GOOD WRITE
nice write ...the emotions of a girl child are well brought in here .....we all hav experienced it bt never had i thought of writing a poem on it .....nice n typical choice of theme..... -
Boy Do I remember!
Great write that brings some sweet n sour memories... though I personally don't remember much problems, of course its a different story for my parents (lol)... wow the stage in between a tween and teen is life changing and your poem brings the fact so beautifully... Absolutely great read.... thanks for sharing your talent.... take care Minoo
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naw your not goin through puberty
maybe emotionally a bit but naw
at 11 you should have sex education by now.
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Hi, welcome to AP, you have certainly started with a really fantastic poem.
A wonderful story about girls your age ... we have all been there and it is silly that we don't know why we cry and then laugh
This was a pleasure to read and I hope that you will write many more poems that will make us all want to read you.
All the best
Sue
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Hello.
This is a good first piece all things considered, your rhythm and rhyme was done well and you stayed quite true to the structure you had defined. I can not relate to what it must feel like to be a girl, or a girl going through puberty though, hahaha.
The only correction needed is in the fifth Stanza last line it should be spelt "wail". A good first write, keep up the good work, continue to push yourself as you learnt to express yourself in the way only you can, and above all else stay true to yourself. I wish you well in the contest.
My regards.
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Awww sweetie! First of all, welcome to AP! *hugs*
I remember as well going through this stage, and believe this wont be the last time! Us women go through so many stages and changes, it's hard to keep up with. Sweetie, if you ever need someone to talk to, feel free to message me
Some of my favorite lines:
"I was crying buckets
filling them to the top" - crying buckets, I like that, very visual!
"my eyes had sprung a leak
not only was I crying
now my body was getting weak" - my eyes had sprung a leak - creative wording
I love the rhyming, and although I know puberty can be a drag, you've created an amazing first write here on AP - Again - WELCOME!!!!
Always, Amber
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Are you kidding me?
First the tears for no reason
and for no reason now the joy
I can tell you one thing...
this wouldn't happen to a boy
It happens, but the beauty of being a girl, is you allow yourself the freedom to express it.
You expressed it, very beautifully in your poem. I can see your Mom has some serious competition.
I look forward to reading all your work. Keep writing!
Slayer
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Welcome :)
First let me give you a big welcome to AP This is very well constructed and rhymes beautifully another talented youngster to join AP , congratulations on a great first poem, cant coment too much on the crying coz im not a girl 
but this is a great write and i wish you good luck in the contest
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Yup, puberty...I'm just glad we only have to go through it once in our lifetimes! I cry for no reason, too, sometimes. My parents are like, "what's wrong?" and then I feel totally humiliated! Lol. Anyway, great poem! Your rhyming and flow is really good. Good luck in the contest.
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Cute write. Enjoyed the rhyming and rhythm which were quite impressive (for anyone, but ever more so someone your age.)
Yah, both gals and guys have their quirks and differences that make them unique but as long as you remember that you are special for who you are, you'll be okay. Best of luck in the contest and in life.
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Welcome To Allpoetry
Hello punkbeauty,
oh yes.. I remember going through this.. Lol. I really wish you better luck then I had.. Crying for no reason really?(check) Laughing because only you think that something funny when no one else would think it is(check) getting angry just because (check) lol. yeah.. I think boys have it easy 
you really did a wonderful job here.. I got a smile out of it and a laugh on my memories that this brought up. THank you very much for sharing this! I'm sure a lot of woman will be able to relate! best of luck in your contest dear.. Keep up the wonderful writes!!
Jetleena
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lol, yep been there, haha. greta poem though. i loved ti so much. it had a great flow to it and it's rhyming was wonderful. i like how you said
Out of nowhere now I was laughing
something was funny...I guess
uncontrolable laughter shook me
I was quite an awful mess
First the tears for no reason
and for no reason now the joy
I can tell you one thing...
this wouldn't happen to a boy
haha, guys got it so easy! they have it better then us girls for sure! but hey we are smarter, lol, just joking. but great poem.
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