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Mulberry Coast

Upon New Ithaca's mulberry coast
Penelope walks slow upon the shore.
Her fingers calling to Ulysses ghost
Oblivious to suitors at her door.

Long seven years have come and gone alone
He's not come back, the story's come undone.
The ill winds born of Neptune's wrath have blown
'till Scylla's and Charybdis' powers have won.

Death stands beside her pointing o'er the sea.
Her heart is twisted, ripped in passion's grip.
She stares where destiny points tragically,
Feet firm on shore, heart on a sinking ship.

So, who is it that longs for love from me?
This woman she despairs so not to be.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Door #3 (Where Carrol Merrill is now standing.)Sonnet Passion

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  • Pure Thought silver member
    August 21, 2008
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    Didn't get gold ?????

    Must be molybdenum, worth more on the market, but not well known to the masses.

    Damn solid write.


    • PerVirtuous
      August 22, 2008
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      Look, I got an emoticon as a comment, what more could a man want?


      • Pure Thought silver member
        August 22, 2008

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        You know in some other cultures, thumbs up symbol means something else. Hmmmm, would that be an inuendo? LOL


  • Dalaney gold member
    August 20, 2008
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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 19, 2008
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    Beautifully written! What else can I say!


  • Suzianne
    August 18, 2008

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    Tragic beauty....

    This is beautiful and the lines, "She stares where destiny points tragically,/ Feet stuck on shore, heart on a sinking ship" take my breath away.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    I'm not going to jump up and down like my sister did, but this'll do nicely, and deserves a few bunnies - if I can make the little buggers serve me.


    • PerVirtuous
      August 17, 2008
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      We have a hurricane coming, we don't need an earthquake. Good call.



      You must have been all out of points. now you have some.

      • Mairi bheag gold member
        August 17, 2008
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        Now you're casting aspersions on my weight!


        • PerVirtuous
          August 17, 2008
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          You CAN'T expect me to pass up THAT good an opening. I only have so much willpower.

          • Mairi bheag gold member
            August 17, 2008
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            Socrates would have passed it up!


            • PerVirtuous
              August 17, 2008
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              Yeah and he was killed. I got to be a little different. Besides, I could have been referring to the passion of your foot stomping and not your weight.


  • Amera gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    You are a master of emotional imagery but this poem is charged with more emotional imagery than most of your work. I know who it is written for and I know it will make her cry. To comment on your sonnet form would be redundant because you never compose a bad sonnet. This is brilliant and will live on well after we’re all gone.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • cheaphotelsign
    August 17, 2008

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    Oooo...felt the sea-spray spitting on me...a dark wind cold up the skirts of the widow's peak...felt the nauseating roll of the mad waves...yeah- i can dig this. well done stranger...glad i stopped by.

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