Sitting on her bathroom floor,
She's been here one too many times,
Tonight she makes the final scar,
Her mind focused on past sights.
As the final mark is made
On the skin of this lonely girl,
Words are muttered emotionally,
Before leaving this world.
[[♥]]
To everyone who's ever loved,
Everyone who's ever hurt,
My heart goes out to you,
Every little part...
To everyone I failed,
The ones I didn't make proud,
While my strength has finally given out,
And my voice no longer loud...
To everyone I loved,
Those I never meant to hurt,
You've shown me my mistake,
And torn me all apart...
To everyone I needed,
All the ones I leaned on,
I've held you down long enough,
Kept you from moving on...
To everyone I insisted,
The people I forced to help,
For wasting your time on little things,
When there were problems with yourself...
To everyone I offended,
Those I've pissed off,
Unaware that life is too short,
To waste on little stuff...
To everyone I worried,
The ones who feared for me,
I admit I'm stupid and completely selfish,
But someday you will see...
To everyone I stole,
Everyone who loved me,
It's time to release my hand,
And set my shattered soul free...
To everyone, everywhere,
Everyone I've ever met,
I'm so deeply sorry,
For every one of my regrets.
This apology comes from within,
Deep inside my heart and soul,
I know it isn't much,
Yet it's about as rich as gold.
I'm sorry for everything,
Every small and large sacrifice,
I've held you all back long enough,
Made you walk with me on thin ice.
It's time to let me go,
Forget of even my name,
Yet knowing I still love you,
If it's all the same...
Know also I'll never forget,
I'll never forgive the mistakes I've made,
You are all held in my shattered heart...
And now, with all that said...
[[♥]]
The final shock of the blade,
The final ticking of her very hour,
Her shattered heart went out to everyone,
Sent from the greatest heavenly tower.
Her apologies made peacefully,
Yet her regrets lingering still,
Her body will forever lay limp,
No more pain will she ever feel...
Author notes
Old habits... Terrifying temptations... Are so damn easy to go back to.......
[[I honestly hate myself...]]
[[x]]Contest Info[[x]]
Name: i.love.you.baby
I hate Edd
In a list
A contest entry
- Love me, hate me, it's all the same to me!!!! by HeartBr8ker.
400 points, ended August 22, 2008, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Awesome write!!!!!
This is an absolute amazing write. You have brought a tear to my eye. And so you have made it to the finalist. Yay for you. But as a finalist you have to do one thing more. You must message me to find out what that is. Again Great write.
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"Sitting in her bathroom floor," i do not know if you mean "in" her ......" or that it is supposed to be "on" her bathroom floor..."
it does show fact that i am sure many can relate too and what changes need to be done before one chooses an end.... before it is chosen for them.... -
Ok I really enjoyed this, I liked the repetition. My only comment is to make clear when and where narration and thoght and feeling of the character come in. i got a little confused. But dont take this the wrong way I really did like the poem.
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For the first line, i'm thinking "on" may sound better than "in"
this stanza
"This apology comes from within,
Deep inside my heart and soul,
I know it isn't much,
But it's about as rich as gold."
seems just a bit awkward, especially the last two lines of it.
then in the following stanza,
the line "forget of even my name" i think may sound better with some revision...
maybe its just me.
all in all, i like this poem,
its very easy for many people to relate to.
and it captures the readers attention
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Mmmm babydoll this is beautiful. *hugs and kisses cheek* I'm here for you, y'know that.
You're my rimshot with a bit of a thunderstorm, sprinkled with some sugar and drizzled with mandyness. Mmmm IFLY hunneh. XOXO. Luuuuv u Mandynes.
~S~
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wow. this is really relatable. i always try to think of it in the way that i made this change.. a positive change, and as easy as the old habits would be to fall into for the sake of easing a little of the pressure, there'd still be the let down of knowing you went back.
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This is so...so...indescribable, so beautiful yet filled with emotions so deep. Keep writing ya
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I hate that I connected to this piece as much as I did...it was very painful to read, yet I could not stop. Therefore, as a writer, your did you job very well.
I have been..maybe still am...that girl of which you write or, or rather, I relate to her. It's one thing to have all of these feelings and write them down. But if they are never truly expressed...they may be found, randomly scribbled in a notebook...too late.
Thank you for sharing,
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FUCK ME DEAD!
So deep, so tragic - can I say there would be nobody in your life to apologise for unless somebody loved you & cared about you & hooped for you & wanted to play a part in rebuilding you. You write beautifully; You rent yourself open! Don't throw your hand, keep writing... -
wow, wow, dear, just don't cut yourself,i have been through that before and yea, it becomes adictive. now to the poem. i loved it so much for ti was real. it wasn't fake, pand the perfect world image so many believe, i liked the raw emotions you stuffed into it, great write!
To everyone, everywhere,
Everyone I've ever met,
I'm so deeply sorry,
For every one of my regrets.
This apology comes from within,
Deep inside my heart and soul,
I know it isn't much,
But it's about as rich as gold.
I'm sorry for everything,
Every small and large sacrifice,
I've held you all back long enough,
Made you walk with me on thin ice.
It's time to let me go,
Forget of even my name,
Yet knowing I still love you,
If it's all the same...
so so beautiful, yet so so sad!
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I love it...i feel the same way all of the tim
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This is beatuful its such a great write it really touched me great job
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