Twist the cap, say hello
then throw me your advice
Watch as time ticks on by
Don't spare me any thought
See that you hear me
See that your near
Wandering shadows insist that you're here
Comfortable in a place
That I've never been
Hold yourself back
or let yourself in
Silence is peeling
Dripping down off the walls
that stickiness stays
even after you wash it off
Grounded I may seem
but how close do you come
Wipe that smile off your face
I know that your done
Author notes
Don't ask me what this is about!! Some of it I know but the rest is a mystery. Just tried writing and not thinking.
Written January 15th, 2004
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Comments
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i kinda got an overdose kinda vibe off of this, or maybe doing extacy. not sure.
really good, though.
-Matt -
I've seen this more and more, and I've noticed I
do it sometimes to. Writing without thinking, without
worrying about what you're going to end up with.
You came up with some great and very original lines.
A couple of examples being:
"Wandering shadows insist that you're here"
"Silence is peeling
Dripping down off the walls"
I liked these lines too, but to me this sounds like
drinking a beer or something:
"Twist the cap, say hello
then throw me your advice"
As a whole, it sounds to me like you really
have someone on your mind. Maybe someone you're
having some problems with...
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The things this bought up in my head... I thought:
"Twist the cap, say hello
then throw me your advice
Watch as time ticks on by
Don't spare me any thought"
- Might mean putting a message in a bottle? But then the rest sort of put me off track...
I like it, its subtle, but has a good, ambiguous message. Well written and well done.
lynn xXx
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