The apathetic words dripped from your lips
& afflicted wounds on my bleeding heart in my hand
& you didn't seem to have a care in the world
I've always known that "words" are false idols
But I cling to them so intensely
Until the true reality is forced out of sight.
My emotions were existent in a bounded space in my mind
Guarded by a simplistic lock & key
...then again
You would surely know that if you ever bothered to get to know me.
I tasted your presence & accumulated all the time that we had
Which was little to nothing
besides one night out of the slow & dreadful passing month.
So I realized you haven't noticed
The changes that I've made to be good enough for you
But maybe that's just it
You've held me so long by your unconquerable chains & endless games
That without me, you wouldn't have the slightest idea on what to do.
[I've held my tongue too long & I'm.falling.apart
What's really nagging at thoughts is that you've known.from.the.very.start.
that you were breaking my heart.]
You always used your little masquerade
To deceive unwitting minds like my own
Only so you could acquire what your black heart craved
You toy with me so cynically that my blinded eyes have come to understand
I deserve to be treated fairly
rather than being your used-torn-up-ragged-doll all over again.
So don't be completely surprised
When you find yourself walking down a path you created for yourself
A path I don't have the strength to follow you down
A path where I just can't be myself.
[I've held my tongue too long & I'm.falling.apart
What's really nagging at thoughts is that you've known.from.the.very.start.
that you were breaking my heart.] ♥
Author notes
heartbreakkk.
A contest entry
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525 points, ended September 6, 2008, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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this is a really good right. it really shows how easy it is to confuse passion for love. very good
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Wowww
Loveee this . You always open up my eyes to a brand new light in your poems && I love all your metaphors !
*[I've held my tongue too long & I'm.falling.apart
What's really nagging at thoughts is that you've known.from.the.very.start.
that you were breaking my heart.] ♥*
Favorite lines in the worldddd. Ohemgee, those are seriously PERRRFECT ! They knew. And they did it anyway.
"This is to all the times i wish I had said no. This is to all the times I knew what he was doing..and I ignored it."
We are definitely not so easily won over anymore. Hah. We're hard as steel now!! Hahaha
loveyouu<3
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So I realized you haven't noticed
The changes that I've made to be good enough for you
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gaah felt like that before suckss
You always used your little masquerade
To deceive unwitting minds like my own
Only so you could acquire what your black heart craved
You toy with me so cynically that my blinded eyes have come to understand
I deserve to be treated fairly
rather than being your used-torn-up-ragged-doll all over again.
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this stanza is really well written, i loved the words you used and the imagery & emotions in it.
[I've held my tongue too long & I'm.falling.apart
What's really nagging at thoughts is that you've known.from.the.very.start.
that you were breaking my heart.] ♥
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i like the repetition of that in the end and the middle
since it was a strong stanza it made the poem more powerful and emotional. and the message abotu heartbreak you were sending through really hit hard
thanks a lot for enterting and goodluck
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