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Butterfly to Lioness

You were for me, a golden ocean,
My heavenly butterfly with wings,
So powerful, so vivid, so gentle.
You reconstructed the fractured branches
Of my long dead life
Like a miracle-maker of divinity
Or a drop of fresh rain on draughty land,
Encouraging healing.
A figure of perfection indeed.

Yet one day, the butterfly,
So intensely beautiful and kind,
Wilted and departed to a wrecking life,
Wholly dissipated in the menacing sky
And a figure of transition appeared,
A ferocious lioness-like beast,
Spectacularly calumnious
You are, sorrowfully.
You made me reach my unreachable,
But soon you let me go,
Not just once but repeatedly.
You speared my palpitating heart,
Ferocious beast.
This slow bettering process,
The needles pinching deep scars
Was thoroughly painful
But I had to endure that too.

And now, on this weak wedge,
I ponder whether I will encounter
The butterfly I miss
Somewhere faraway
On wings like the ones I’ll wear
Soon, when the wedge descends.

Author notes

option 3
i'd say white, at the moment XD

thanks Bloody Fragrance!!!

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  • MJ Forgives
    September 6

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    I really like your poem. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for entering.
    -Jess

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    January 12
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    Thank you for your heartfelt entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • Danna Hobart
    December 30, 2008
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    Thanks for entering.


  • ShiningNShadows
    December 7, 2008
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    Very very nice. Loved the imagery and hidden meanings. Good luck in my contest!


  • PerfectImperfection
    November 12, 2008

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    A well spoken piece of love, and that bitter sadness that remains once it has gone. Thank you for your entry!


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    October 14, 2008

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    Such imagery of thoughts rivet within this beautiful poem
    Best wishes to you
    Julie


  • perfectsunset gold member
    September 8, 2008

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    Deeply beautiful & dark write filled with many emotions & thoughts. Well crafted piece!

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • Corinthians13-4
    August 27, 2008

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    Wonderful metaphors and imagery. It made this poem all the more enjoyable. It portrayed perfectly the abrupt changes that can occur in a relationship: from someone loving, caring, and kind to someone who rips your heart into pieces using no restraint. From a butterfly to a ferocious beast. I know the feeling.
    Well done and thank you for letting me read this.

    <3 Erin

  • piccola silver member
    August 21, 2008
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    great imagery and thoughts thank you for the entry


  • Childofserenity
    August 19, 2008
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    Nice poem, the pain of realtionships... i know that pain. Good luck mate, and ty for entering.

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