she watched the stars
through a corpus covering
of intricate flesh and bone;
her curdled cartilage.
and her stitched eyes
[saw everything]
through bleeding ears.
how interesting
that everything existed
beyond her line of sight.
Author notes
Image by thesealovesthesky at deviantart.com
In a list
A contest entry
- Questionable Prompts I by B Chandler.
600 points, ended August 17, 2008, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Awesome
How the senses help each other.
Another great piece. Can't beleive it only got bronze.
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and her stitched eyes
[saw everything]
through bleeding ears.
wow thats really good this goes so well with the pic congrats on bronze well deserved
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This is really great. I like the take on the prompt.
"she watched the stars
through a corpus covering
of intricate flesh and bone;
her curdled cartilage."
This is a great stanza. The way you describe being blind is very intriguing. I love it.
"and her stitched eyes
[saw everything]
through bleeding ears."
I like that. That she's "seeing" through her ears. Wonderfully written.
"how interesting
that everything existed
beyond her line of sight."
I like this ending. :] Your poem is fantastic. Good luck in the contest!
-Lily♥
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Commentary
You've taken the question and given it a metaphorical answer without truly realizing there was neither a question or an answer there. Kudos for this. By the way, unless I'm mistaken, I think you meant to say 'sight' -unless 'site' was purposely inputted
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