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Inexpungible Memories

I feel pain all over me
And exhausted screams just wanting to escape
I feel that doom-fated hand
Slapping me
Touching me
Scrutinizing me
With shrieks of evil laughter
Vast in the devoid space
Tears stuck on my emotionless face
And not one single trace
Of disgrace
On his unbearable face

I feel that repellent hand
Smirching me in everyway
And plundering my childhood
Never returning it back
Pulverizing it
Smash and smash again and again

My soul like shattered glass
Scattered all over the place
My soul burning with wretchedness
And bitterness as well
My soul and me
Confounded in a confining-trap
Of undergoing imperishable obstacles
Yet its memories like patches of mist

And still that enshrouding air
On that surfeited and utterly blemished face
Remains there
And will forever
Be part of what remains of the specks of glass,
Those left of my poor soul
And also part of the shive of memory
That torments my every step all year round…

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Vanishing - - Soul

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  • Dryad Enya
    June 24

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    Thank-you

    I don't supose it helps that i was listening to a sad song while reading this but i think this was genuienly heart breaking. -finds heart, ties it back together- I wish you the best of luck in future with your wirtting, but may i just suggest you check the spelling on one or two of your words.

    Immpecable work here
    Gorecki


  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    October 24, 2008

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    This is absolutely heartbreaking. Beautiful imagery, and overall an extremely powerful write. Thankyou so muc for entering.

    ~*~DramaQueen469~*~


  • Wulf-Eyez De Winter gold member
    September 13, 2008
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    this is a very powerful piece....i really like it...thank you


  • HereComesTheSun
    September 13, 2008
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    you drew a great poem

    everyword was great all together a fantastic poem


  • Butterfly.Wingz
    September 12, 2008

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    wonderfly choice of words hun and you pieced it together so well thank you for your entry and good luck

  • Broken-Bones
    September 10, 2008

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    This was really heartbreaking to read, you really conveyed the pain and it was easy to see it was both emotional and physical. You showed how our past experiences stay with us and that added to all the emotion made a really powerful piece. I thought your description was really effective and it created some sad and dark images. Great work x


  • nevadapoet
    September 6, 2008

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    What a beautiful write, a great entry for this contest. A perfectly penned write with great flow and good imagery. Thank you for the entry. Keep the pen flowing...the pleasure was all mine.
    Nevadapoet


  • Velvet Rose Petals
    August 30, 2008

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    I originally did catch on to the abuse part of the poem in the first stanza. But I think you were abuse in all ways possible. Emotional and physical. I can only imagine what it would be like to feel both at the same time. My heart goes out to you and gorgeously written
    Rose
    Thanks for the clarrificatio

  • Velvet Rose Petals
    August 30, 2008
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    the pain you are speaking of i am not really sure whether it is emotional or physical pain or if it is both. Can you just add mroe into your author notes, about the pain and how it has affected yo.
    Rose


  • darlintlc silver member
    August 26, 2008

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    Very emotional poem filled with pain that comes with the child inside you being "plundered" by an evil soul and carring the memories into the years with you always!!

    Thanks for sharing and for entering
    darlintlc

  • limechic
    August 24, 2008

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    Wow I love the imagery in this one...it's very powerful, and I can tell it was written with emotion.

    Great job, good luck in the contest!


  • Hikari Lady
    August 24, 2008

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    That's very Gothic and touching, really enjoyed reading it.

    My soul like shattered glass
    Scattered all over the place
    My soul burning with wretchedness
    And bitterness as well
    My soul and me
    Confounded in a confining-trap

    These are my fav lines, they gave me a feeling of a body connected to its soul so deeply.
    Thanks for sharing!


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    August 22, 2008

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    Very cool title and a chaotic write. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Childofserenity
    August 19, 2008

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    I like the deep meaning. Well atleast what i got from it. i found it very intriguing. thany you for entering.


  • HazardousHeroine
    August 18, 2008
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    so deep! I love it!! Congrats youre a finalist!


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    August 18, 2008

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    Welcome to Allpoetry!

    This is a lovely poem, i really enjoyed reading it your imagery in this piece is just superb and your vocabulary is like whoa great Welcome to ap, i hope you feel as welcomed as you should be. This is my favorite part of the poem its just amazing in imagery and pain.

    My soul like shattered glass
    Scattered all over the place
    My soul burning with wretchedness
    And bitterness as well
    My soul and me
    Confounded in a confining-trap
    Of undergoing imperishable obstacles
    Yet its memories like patches of mist



  • Blooming Poet
    August 18, 2008

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    WELCOME TO ALLPOETRY

    I really like how you worded certain things. I really like doom-fated very unique. I also notice your vocabulary is amazing, in this poem I am seeing many words I do not see very often and that is a good thing, it shows you can step outside to box and make unique poetry. I agree with the last commenter, thee last line seems awkward and I didn't understand what it meant. A very well written dark write and it showcases the great poetic ability you have. Once again welcome to allpoetry and I hope grow poetically through Allpoetry.

    Molly
    Site Greeter


  • ellaelu
    August 17, 2008

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    I looove this but I am curious about the very last line..seems like a word might be missing..but I think it is a wonderful write with excellent use of imagery. great job

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