Poor little senior, sittin' all alone.
Shaggy, unkempt hair hides a face made of stone.
Waiting for the bell to ring, for school again to start.
Trying to hide the fact you feel,
Trying to hide your heart.
About your insecurities no one would ever know,
Feeding on freshman doubts,
Leeching life from those below.
Act all big and mighty, boy,
Like you can survive on your own.
But tell me now, how does it feel to spend senior year alone?
Author notes
Written about an obnoxious senior at my school who is well known as an sexist, self centered ass. Yeah, the one time he ever talked he destoryed what little self esteem I have left, but I can't help but be intrigued by him. I wonder what happened to him and feel sorry for him. So he humiliated me, and treated me like crap? So what? I still wonder what happened to him...
Sticks-And-Stones
ASILAYDYING
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Great poem. Thank you so much for entering. Good luck in both my contest and future contests.
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Well I give you kudos about being intrigued by this. You should get in sociology if your school offers it. Being an upperclassmen now, I understand why seniors do retartded things. Upperclassmen feel like they're on top. They're the oldest, so they feel like they're in control. Sometimes people mask they're insecurities by acting like they can control people. Great write, and kudos for being curious and sympathetic to him. Some people handle insecurities in different ways.
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ill start with saying that this is a great write
in genaral i thought this to be pretty good with minamal grammer mistakes/flaws
it dident flow the best but it still got to me
good work 7.2/10
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very intriguing, nice ideas, i loved the different angles you looked at it with, good job
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Hmm it does make you wonder sometimes doesn't it? Why did he act the way he did? Where is he now? Hmm hmm hmm...
I like the poem though, the rhyming worked out well...I like the "trying to hide your heart" line...it's so true for so many of those bullies.
Great job, good luck in the contest!
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2nd line should be hides, 3rd line should be rings.
You know, in high school when you get those assholes that love to bully people and think they are all that, they are normally the ones to be least successful in life. It seems like you have a kind soul to have empathy for him after he humiliated you. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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