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Twilight of the Gods ~ Part II

 

 

Bigfoot, Sasquatch, the north-woods rumble
in the latter days to the heavy tread of legends
Creatures clothed in white skins, arctic hare, fox
polar bear. We huddle quiet, terrified, watching
Northern Lights neon up the inky sky where
faint stars twinkle, fires in the eyes of mice

Sargent Preston, King, we call on you!
Burst from the pages of dogeared books
stashed in attics of generations past

crash like a V-2 rocket in their midst
blow them to tatters, stomp them to sludge
We'll honor you with the fat of slain muskrats
you can have our women, unshaved but wanton
since the sad emasculation of the cities

Oh, how the wind blows! How it tears and burns
Tears clink like ice in cocktail glasses
the hair on our legs, freezes to the dead skin
of victims, scattered on the snowy plains
The Shaman in his patched Banana Republics
sleeves replaced by weasel pelts
kneels, breath steaming like a freight train
counts ten, begins the Chant of Summoning

Oh Lord Protect us...




but He will not,
She dips His glowing hand in Gulf Stream waters, watches flying fish
break the gentle swells like silver arrows, watches the setting of the sun
tacks once more to the south, lost in the tradewinds everm
ore, nevermore

 

 

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  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 16, 2008

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    faint stars twinkle, fires in the eyes of mice

    She dips His glowing hand in Gulf Stream waters

    I have never seen a cri-de-coeur melded with prophecy and expressed in such haunting images, metaphors, whatevers... tugs at me.


  • Lute
    August 28, 2008

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    I get the impression upon reading, that you are as scared shitless as some of the rest of us?

    The damndess thing is, it is so overwhelming that too make a poem seems like pissing in the wind.

    Nopey, just might as well bitch about the spark plug in the chain saw, the hurricanes that carry off our pink flamingos and lawn chairs, and our SUV is last years model--Woe me, is what they want to hear about anyways--don't you remember what they did to most of those old prophets anyways? ones they didn't stone, they hung up by their thumbs till the crows came along and plucked out their eyes. It is, they say, best to leave the placid pond alone, so the populace may enjoy the glaze over their eyes.

    Preachin to the converted don't get much done anyways,
    they say Hallelujah, and Amen and flutter their fans.


  • Francesca gold member
    August 19, 2008

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    Wagner's eye is twitching.

    A little Götterdämmerung, eh, Jules? Some wonderfully fresh imagery ("Northern Lights neon up the inky sky" and "watches flying fish break the gentle swells like silver arrows,"); strong similes ("Tears clink like ice in cocktail glasses" and "breath steaming like a freight train") but enigmatic. S'pose I should have a go at Part I.

    Question: "We huddle quiet terrified" ... do you mean "quite terrified" or what you have? If the latter, a comma after "quiet" helps the reader.

    "'Oh Lord Protect us...' but He will not." *tsk-tsk-tsk*

    -- Caroligné


  • malmadre gold member
    August 16, 2008

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    A shift in polarity, not yours, but the earths, making time fold upon itself...these are the thoughts I get from this amazing series, please continue.