opening her umbrella
breathing in all that the rain
stood for in her life,
she smiles wryly
with such compassion as this,
her feet tiptioe
off the ground
into a resounding pirouet
as memories of last summer
play like a reel
in her jumbled-up mind
nothing makes sense
except the point she focus on,
the tip of her umbrella
as she spins,
round and round
as the waves crash in
and lead
to a suspensful finale
of deceit and care
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt by Jasmine Rayne.
900 points, ended August 17, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very nice write. I like the imagery.
"opening her umbrella
breathing in all that the rain
stood for in her life,
she smiles wryly"
I like this stanza a lot. It's a great opening to the poem and very symbolic.
I like "she smiles wryly". Nice word choice. Thank you for entering.
-Lily♥
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